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    Lore

    This is an idea I came up with. It was at one point intended to be the background information of a game, but I probably won't really use it for anything, so I figure i'd post it here. Don't think I've seen too much "lore" narration in this forum, so I have no idea what sort of comments I'll get from you "art/story buffs". (Err, "buff" is the right word, right?)

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    The year is 20XX. Technology has come a long ways. Flying cars have become practical and are travelling through the skyways. Interstellar travel is as commonplace as air travel is today. Genetics have come a long ways as well, for better or for worse. In particular, there is the genetic experiment known as the Genesis Project, named so because it involved the creation of new life. In this project, scientists inserted human genes into various animals. After much trial and error, scientists had successfully given humanlike physical traits to animals. Intelligence in these new beings, dubbed as Genites, is comparable to that of humans. However, the Genites soon began to show dislike of the Genesis Project. Despite now having a higher intelligence, the genites preferred their simpler ways of life.

    After much debate, the Genites were eventually able to convince most of the scientists to discontinue their research. To make it up for the Genites, the scientists searched up a habital planet with an environment much like the world's before technology reigned. There the Genites would live as hunters and farmers much like humans had so many years ago. The few scientists that continued their research moved on to genetically altering the forms of humans, giving humans animal-like traits. This method of course eventually became known as "splicing".

    The Genites, on their new homeworld (which they fittingly call New Genesis), had begun to populate their world. Some eventually gained an interest in technology. Eventually a few scant spaceports (airports of the future) were built on the planet, and they took part in interstellar travel much like the humans that created them. Some even returned to the world the Genites were created, to live new lives there. Humans would also visit the Genites' world, some even finding the simple life much more preferable than the chaotic life back home. The majority of the Genites, though, would continue to live their simple lives on New Genesis, just as most humans would prefer living in their technological world. It is the life they would always prefer.

    It should be noted that a second race of beings were created by a few scientists, based on mythical creatures of ancient times. However, before very many of these "mythos" were created, it was declared by law that such experimentation would be immoral and illegal. "Splicing" on the other hand would remain legal with conditions, due to human subjects being volunteers, unlike the animals that unwillingly became subject to these experiments. Since so few of these "mythos" have been created, it is not well known what their current status or preffered lifestyle is.
    "What if like...there was an exact copy of you somewhere, except they're the opposite gender, like you guys could literally have a freaky friday moment and nothing would change. Imagine the best friendship that could be found there."

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    Re: Lore

    I just expended a great deal of editorial effort on Caciss's story topic, and as much as I would like to run through this one and give you my two cents' worth, I'm too tired to do it now. I didn't even realize this was here until this morning, and I've made it a personal goal to give equal treatment to serious pieces of writing. I had no idea what 'lores' the way you used it meant until I read this, but I don't see anything particularly bad about it. It's like writing a premise for a novel or a video game, an indepth summary of events that will get you into the story and world that much faster.

    I'll give you my full thoughts tonight sometime.
    "Mindless killing doesn't do a lot for me anymore." - Sampson

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      Re: Lore

      To make it up for the Genites, the scientists searched up a habital planet with an environment much like the world's before technology reigned.
      Instead of habital - which I'm pretty sure is not a word - I think you were looking for habitable. I'm unsure of how to interpret the second half of this sentence. Is it supposed to be "the world's (read: Earth) before technology reigned" or "the (other) worlds before technology reigned"? If it is supposed to be taken as Earth (or a planet similar), world's is probably not the best way to say it. To make up for the Genites, the scientists searched up a habitable planet with an environment much like the world was before technology reigned.

      Since so few of these "mythos" have been created, it is not well known what their current status or preffered lifestyle is.
      Typo, should be preferred.

      That was essentially it for grammar and spelling. The sentences are all mostly simple, which creates a lot fewer errors and less confusion. I like to think that a nice mixture of complex and simplex sentences makes for the best writing, as you aren't trying to be overly elaborate, and you aren't making it a bore to read short sentence after sentence. A lot of these sentences could probably be combined, but they certainly are not grammatically incorrect the way they are now.

      The idea is pretty good, and if you followed it up with a normal narrative to get the story rolling, it would be infinitely better. I can't say I actually enjoyed reading this, as it's hard to enjoy narrative without characters to drive the plot, but I would be interested to see where this goes if you decided to make a story of it.
      "Mindless killing doesn't do a lot for me anymore." - Sampson

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