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[Virus Chris]

I'm going to make a game called, "Chris the Legendary Hero: Journey of Worlds"

In this game you play as a boy named Chris (you change his name to be yours or any name you want) who's a reincarntion of an ancient hero that must save the world of "Magic Quest World" from the evil VirusMonsters that want to destroy everything. At the start of the game you begin playing as Chris fighting DarkBlade (A Super Elite VirusMonster) and Nexus (the hero's evil look-alike which you learn more about as the story goes on). After chipping away half of one or both their health, the master of the VirusMonsters in the Dark World watchs and plans something and talks about some ritual by using three stong souls of other worlds. Then three swirls of light appear in the sky appear Chris, DarkBlade, and Nexus and three different colored light get shattered around some parts of the world, with one that falls on top of Chris. From here on end Chris and the other heroes (which he teams up later) go on a journey to help the heroes return home and stop the VirusMonsters' evil plan to destroy the world and other worlds too. And in some point of the game you switch between Chris and George, who is the reincarntion of the second Legendary Hero and battle against the VirusMonsters by himself. The plot gets darker and darker as you play.

Here's what's feature in my game:

- Special guest stars
- Switching between the main hero and George

Can't think of anything right now, but what do you think of my game?

PS: I hope I don't get in trouble with these special guest star, but I really like to have them in my game.

[Jamos' Old Account]

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I will be honest, it needs a little work. With enough work you can turn this into a pretty sweet game. The premise is okay so far and I like the name Nexus (I don't know why.) Now, I can understand why you named the main character Chris, but why George? Is he a name of a friend you're including or what? If not I would suggest a different name.

BTW, I doubt special quest stars will get you in trouble (unless if you use Tom Cruise.)

[Virus Chris]

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I will be honest, it needs a little work. With enough work you can turn this into a pretty sweet game. The premise is okay so far and I like the name Nexus (I don't know why.) Now, I can understand why you named the main character Chris, but why George? Is he a name of a friend you're including or what? If not I would suggest a different name.

BTW, I doubt special quest stars will get you in trouble (unless if you use Tom Cruise.)

Thanks for your opinion and I know it needs a little more work, I just sometimes have a bit of a hard time trying to say or type in this matter how to tell about my game and I don't what to spoil too much of my game. I named that character's name George, because he's my cousin George (distant cousin actually) that lives in Flordia now and I wanted him to be in my game since we're the best of friends. The reason I named one of the villains Nexus is because I wanted to give my character a very unique name that you normally wouldn't hear everyday and that's why he's name is Nexus (and also Nexus, the hero's look-alike, has purple skin and red eyes and in the game it tells you why he looks like that). I'm glad that I won't be in trouble with some special guest stars, thank you for telling me that.

[ErikaFuzzbottom]

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Maybe an intesting variation of George can be made. Like, Geroge.

[Red Dragon]

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Duh George W Bush!

[Virus Chris]

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I put in an input character name event for George if you don't like to have my character's name called this.

[Manyak]

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There a few things that I don't think add up in your game...

I just think that it's kind of strange that there's an "ancient hero" while everything else sounds futuristic and modern.

To me, "Srong Souls" sounds pretty much like a ripoff of every RPG game where you have to collect the "essence" of something or where you have to find fragments of some greater whole.

The plot seems really cliché, I mean, some things trying to destroy the world? Been there done that.

And I just have a suspicon that you want to use these "special guest characters" to try and leech success off of other games instead of making your game equally noteworthy.

I dunno, just something to think about.

[The Dark Jester]

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Magic Quest World=Horrible name.

Why do the monsters want to destroy everything?

I really don't like a lot of your names they all seem terribly generic, Nexus is alright.

What is the setting?

Medeivel?

why are they called Virusmonsters?

Whats their backstory?

I find the plot paper thin and quite cliche.

It kinda seems like theres no point to the adventure except for adventures sake.

[Redneck 2000]

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Why would you post this game idea? It sounds to me like you haven't fleshed it out at all, and are just saying the first things that come to your mind when you think of a game plot. What kind of constructive criticism or even comments do you expect people to say when the idea is in such a primitive stage? I like to think that people on this, the official RPG Maker board, take themselves pretty seriously when it comes to game ideas, and coming to the table with something like this isn't exactly setting yourself up for success.

For instance, "Magic Quest World" isn't even the name for a world. I mean, is that an honest attempt at a name or just something you thought of when you were half-heartedly coming up with plot elements? That sounds more like a description of the world than a proper name. This is really just an allegory for the vast number of problems apparent to even someone taking the quickest of looks at your plot.

If you ever want your game ideas to really become something in the RPG Maker community, you should put some more thoughts and time into them before you unleash them haphazardly unto the public, especially when the public is the biggest RPGM community on the net. I don't know a nicer way to say this, but it definitely needs work.

[Caciss]

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My rating: Boring out of 10

Perhaps it's because you didn't voice your idea very clearly, but the plot seems pretty blah blah blah. Really cliche, and really boring. The player wants to be dragged into the plot, and unless you have a sweet ass battle system or something, it's gonna be a bore.

I'd suggest going through it and fleshing the story out. Explain why these things are happening, where these spirits come from, so on and so forth.

Y'know?

[Libby]

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It's a good structure to stand on, but I feel if this is all your game is made up of, your raft might sink. I have the same problem too, with my story being a bit cliche, but I actually ran a few story ideas (the full story, + spoilers) to a person I met on the pavilion, and it really helped me figure out a few things.. (BTW, Jest, I figured out where she came from. Thanks for the help)

I would change the name of the world to save for that cringing feeling every gamer will have from reading it, and I might allow for a name change of the title. It sounds too..forced if you get my drift. the Journey of Worlds doesn't sound to bad, but the "Chris the Legendary Hero" kinda makes me want to close the thread and look somewhere else. Also, I know you feel that Nexes is not a name you hear everyday, but take it from someone who has been sucking on the fantasy teet for all 24 years of her life. Nexes is one of the most overused names in any sort of fantasy/sci-fi game/movie/book/comic/anime/ect. I am not debunking you for using it, I'm just warning you that it's not as uncommon as you may think.

Also, the VirusMonster's names sound a bit juvinile. I'm not downing them, I'm just giving my honest opinion. here are a few quotes from past posts that might give you a good idea for places to find names - (I hope you guys don't mind me quoting you!)

As for the whole naming problem, I find it helps to take a phrase describing the thing to be named, then translate it to Japanese. (I use http://babelfish.altavista.com.) Other languages work too, as long as you screen names before use (Auf Widershin is not a great character name.) For example, the main character in my game is Kitai (japanese for honor).
Hope that helps!

I like to use http://www.behindthename.com. Currently most of the names I have been using have been from people I know, or things that come to mind. Like the name of the town "Christopher." is not changing, but it just came to mind.

I just discovered a wonderful source of names.

The PDR! (Physicians Desk Reference)

It lists thousands of names of pharmaceuticals. Some actually work surprisingly well.

I hope my too long post helps a bit. I understand the frustration of not knowing what to do with a story.

Edited for Tagginess.

[Jamos' Old Account]

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Virus Chris, I hope you came up with more to the plot by now. What you have was okay to start out with, but it needs much more. I believe any idea can be a great one with enough work. You do need to change the name of the world. It is kind of like calling Earth; "Multicultural Conflictional World."
The Virusmonsters seem to not have a reason to destroy everything. Are they just mindless creatures that just eat everything they see? Don't think that I am trying to bring you down, though. I am just trying to help you out.
Good luck.

[ichabod]

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rate my game guys. Its based off section 1 of the novel i wrote. It is called cesius. His sister gets kidnapped by dante. it is his job to destroy dante and save his sister. He has many struggles on the way though. He must fight evil beasts.

[Libby]

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rate my game guys. Its based off section 1 of the novel i wrote. It is called cesius. His sister gets kidnapped by dante. it is his job to destroy dante and save his sister. He has many struggles on the way though. He must fight evil beasts.

Make your own thread. You can get in trouble with the Mods if you hijack someone else's thread!

[John Mora]

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I'll rate your game when you make it.