When Dragons attack

[taichi]

After you read the plot please rate and tell me what you think of it.

It has been 100 years since the dragons attacked. Battle after Battle, the two sides seemed even. The human government went for the final strike and sent their best general and their best soldiers with him. That man's name was Heru. After that 2 month battle the dragons ultimatly won. They took over the human country and treated them like slaves. They ate them, made them wash and polish their scales, made them look out for their dens, and many thing like that. They also attack communities, these places are lucky as they aren't slaves, for taxes and if 5 people don't pay the whole village get destroyed. One day A 17 year old boy/man who lost nearly everything but his friends, decides to fight and take on the dragons to force them out of the country. His friends, having lost everything too go along with him. Why shouldn't they, after all they have nothing to lose. Will they succeed or will they become play toys or become supper for the dragons? Should I actually name it this or Quoteo: The beginning because the Sequal is already written done. The whole thing I typed it.

[Red Dragon]

Re: When Dragons attack

First: Grammar issues, not to nit-pick I have 'em myself.

So let me get the story in a nutshell
Dragons and Humans Had a War
Dragons won
Dragons inslave Humans/Tax them to death
Manboy and gang of friends fight back

Not really much detail of what is happening in the now, really in the then. Who are these gang of friends? Who is Manboy? Why are they fighting back besides having nothing to do? There is a huge chunk of the story missing.

[taichi]

Re: When Dragons attack

Well I'm not sure if I should count 17 as a man or Boy. OK man its somewhat cliche and I'm not really caring about this one. They have NOTHING else to lose so why shouldn't they fight back. They have skills and talents like a mage, fighter, white mage, and dark mage.

[DYRE]

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They have skills and talents like a mage, fighter, white mage, and dark mage.

Oh God.

[taichi]

Re: When Dragons attack

Yeah feel the wrath unoriganality

[JPS]

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Oh God.

You know dyre nothing against you but I havent seen you come up with anything original in a while, you basically did the same thing with my idea

I think the whole white mage/black mage thing works good, that way you actually have to have a strategy and actually have to keep every party member alive, unless you have the resources otherwise, I mean if you have 4 party members and they all can do the same thing whats the fun in that???

[taichi]

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JPS I'm not sure if that is a insult or a complient

[JPS]

Re: When Dragons attack

Its a compliment to your idea, a few days ago I came up with the idea for similar party members and he said something about it

I know youre just voicing your opinion about it dyre, which im not worried about, but cliche is in everything we do RPG wise now, its all been done before

[taichi]

Re: When Dragons attack

still should I name it
When Dragons Attack
or
Quoteo: The beginning?

What do you think of it.

[JPS]

Re: When Dragons attack

still should I name it
When Dragons Attack
or
Quoteo: The beginning?

What do you think of it.

I personally think its more original, When Dragons Attack sounds like an Atari game or a cheesy movie, no offense to the name, but thats just my opinion, others might see it perfectly good

Also Id find a way to get the tax thing out of there, its original but I just dont see it fitting in with the storyline...its like an apple tree in a field of orange trees

Maybe they have to harvest a certain amount of food a year to feed the slaves or the town gets destroyed?

[taichi]

Re: When Dragons attack

I thought you were going to ask why or what is Quoteo. Good thing you didn't. He will be explained in the sequal that takes place 50 years after this

[JPS]

Re: When Dragons attack

I thought you were going to ask why or what is Quoteo. Good thing you didn't. He will be explained in the sequal that takes place 50 years after this

I was about to, but you said there was going to be a sequal, and sequals usually answer all the questions the 1st part left you wandering

[taichi]

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Well I can think a sequal that didn't do that Kingdom Hearts 2. Well I might as well tell you as Quoteo isn't complex and is introduced early in the Sequal. He is in fact the main chracter of the series. IF I continue after that He WILL appear as a playable character in all the Quoteo series games except Quoteo: The beginning.

[Red Dragon]

Re: When Dragons attack

They have NOTHING else to lose so why shouldn't they fight back. They have skills and talents like a mage, fighter, white mage, and dark mage.

Ok, thought of some dialogue for you, based on the info given.

Manboy(no names?!?):"Hey guys, let's fight our slavemasters/tax collectors!" (you didn't specify which one it was for the Scooby gang)
Friend 1: "Why?"
Manboy: "Why not?"
Friend 2: "Because they're Friggin DRAGONS that's what!"
Manboy: "You got a wand, I got a sword, let's go!"
Friend 3: "You don't seem to get it THEY. ARE. DRAGONS."
Manboy: "So? We are squishy humans. What's your point?"
Friend 1: "We don't want to be squished."
Friend 2: "By the way, how did we get all this equipment and skills being so poor/being slaves"
Manboy: "Who cares, we have them. LET'S GO!"
Friend 3: "Y'know, just to make you shut-up let's go get ourselves killed. I mean, it's not like there is a Militia or Revolution starting that we can join/create."
Manboy: "Let's go!"

<LATER>

Manboy: "We are here to free ourselves from you!"
Dragon: "Why?"
Manboy: "We have nothing better to do with our lives!"
Friend 3: "Yeah, we want to throw our lives away so that we can be heroes, or somthing like that."
Dragon: "..."
Manboy: "Plus we all have talents that make us unique for some strange reason even though we lived in poverty/slavery!"
Dragon: "You guys are really bored aren't you?"


Wow, I wrote way too much.

[taichi]

Re: When Dragons attack

That was so funny I forgot to laugh.