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    My game in development

    I'm creating this thread to keep track of my game, but mainly to get any feedback or reccomendations that I can.

    I feel very driven to finish this game, and I will complete it. I should probably have a demo available by May or so if things go as expected. I'm still in the very (very) early stages at the moment, so I don't have much going for the game yet.

    UPDATE 1.01- Added Eve's weapon and some gun information under Setting. I plan on organizing the topic when I get more information. Just for basic purposes, I will Bold any new information per current update.

    UPDATE 1.02- Added Rain, River, Sole, and Lune. Added a feature section, added special abilities, added special ability for Izekial, added short description for Rigel and Izekial, added weaponry for Imbri. Added Rigel's last name(Boles)

    UPDATE 1.03- This game is officially on hold until I get better with RPGM. I do plan to come back to it, but all of the controversy is to much for me, knowing as little about RPG maker as I do.

    Basic Story
    ____________

    The nation of Arcadia is a strong, idealistic nation. Even though surrounded by larger countries, it has a better economy and military than any single one of them.

    Arcadia prides itself on it's peaceful manners, even referring to it's military as the "Peace Corps". The Eastern nation of (yet to be named- I wish to have very effective naming, so I'm going to do some research first.) is at war with Arcadia. The story begins with the Seventeenth general of Arcadia's Eastern front, Rigel, and his soldiers as they hold back the (eastern nation's) northwestern line.

    The game will flow between two storylines that will eventually meet, though I am not entirely sure as to how yet.

    (second storyline-)

    Eve is a shcizophrenic young girl. She lives in a labratory/medical facility. She has been raised there since as long as she can remember. One day she sees one of the doctors operating on a horse. When she peeks closely through the window, she can see that the doctor is holding a knife in his hand, and the horse's muzzle had been cut.

    She has an instantaneous reaction, but she is a smart child. She remains quiet about the situation, as she tries to find the horse. She finds the horse..and a lot more.


    Setting
    ____________

    (My game) is a fantasy, medieval-based game. But it is not lacking in science.

    Guns exsist in the game, but they are largely in study, and not much is known about them. They are used in the military sparsely, and only by high-ranking soldiers with a doctrine in firearms(which takes around six years of study and practice to attain). Even in the hands of a skilled marksman, guns lack the power of even guns in the Revolutionary era. They are a more powerful than bows, and less accurate. Think of them as a prototype.

    Being highly unheard of in the (world's) past, the government doesn't want anyone using a gun who doesn't know about every part of them. They are a new breed of weapon, and the government wants them to be in safe hands. Anyone who has the right to wield a firearm has the knowledge of making a gun, and has full knowledge of every aspect of the gun.

    And no, this isn't a sixteen nations at war kind of game. Arcadia and it's eastern neighbor are at war, and other diplomatic negotiations and possiblities will occur, but it's not going to start out in the middle of a huge war.

    Features
    _________

    Special abilities
    __________

    Characters will have unique abilities. Some may be battle-based, and others adventure-based(such as one who can open locked doors).


    Characters
    __________

    I have only four as of yet. I plan to have a satisfactory number, but I plan to put a LOT more into character development that into number of characters.

    Rigel Boles
    _____
    Male
    Aged 30-36(undecided)
    Seventeenth General of the Peace Corps.(Arcadian military)'s eastern front
    Weapon: Guns(mainly in the powerful category-Shotguns/etc.)
    A man with a proclaimed glory. He is refferred to as "Sir Boles", and he prefers to have his status recognized. He is a gruff, decisive man. He may be an asshole, but he sticks by his orders, not letting human pain or emotion get in his way.

    Izekial
    _______
    Male
    Aged 17-23(undecided)
    A P.C.(abbrevition for Peace Corps-used in horribly-lacking-in-length-possiblity job class names.) soldier under the command of Rigel
    Weapon: Swords(mainly in the rapier/long dagger category)
    A young man who is confused in his idealistic views. He is a curious and patriotic boy, innocent.
    Unique Skill: Negotiation, Diplomacy(inbattle and otherwise)

    Eve
    ______
    Female
    Aged 5-12(undecided)
    A young girl with schizophrenia. A resident of a labratory in Arcadia's science district. She is horribly empathetic and doesn't understand the half of it.
    Weapon: Rings/amulets(I plan on having more than just these. But they will be unique mental-based weapons, probably.)

    Imbri
    ______
    Horse, male/female(undecided)
    Aged (undecided)
    A stallion/mare that Eve watched being operated on.
    (*POSSIBLE STORYLINE SPOILER*)







    She was genetically altered to understand the Human language in near-perfect accuracy. Because of this, her intelligence far surpasses any normal animal. Scientists wanted to be able to have contact with her, but they lack any knowledge on the tongue. So, they altered her eyes to be a pure black, having a faint texture that captures and entrances anyone looking into her eyes. She can display emotion and basic conversation to anyone entranced(as unrealistic as it might sound, it's actually quite realistic. The eyes can display a prism of emotions, and ones altered to capture attention can easily display even more of the being's concept)

    *END SPOILER*




    Equipment: Horseshoes (thanks William)

    River
    ______
    Male
    Aged(undecided)
    A son of (Country to west's King. Need to study some more.). He is a kind man, like his brother Sole.
    Equipment: Spear

    Rain
    ______
    Female
    Aged(Undecided)
    Daughter of (Country to west's King. Need to study some more.). She has many physical qualities of an assassain, though she wears a noble robe. When speaking, her words are few, but meaningful.
    Equipment: Claws

    Sole
    ______
    Male
    Aged(Undecided)
    Grand commander of Arcadia's Peace Corps. A kind, stalwart man. He is very idealistic, and very young for someone to hold a status such as his. He left the (country to west) to come to Arcadia because his father, the king, dismissed him as being his offspring. This has caused a disliking for the (country to west) amongst the populace, of whom hold a strong following for Sole.
    Equipment: Scimtar/cutlass type swords

    Lune
    ______
    Horse, Male
    Aged(Undecided)
    Lune is a powerful stallion with a pure silver mane. He was said to be bred for his beauty and strength, and he shows pure characteristics of both. He is the steed of Commander Sole, and is treated highly. He is mainly recognized because of his unique appearance and high status.
    Equipment:Horsehoes




    __________________________________


    Obviously, I am not very far at all into my game. This is just the very, very basic setup for my story. I will continue updating the story, characters, setting, features, and the like as I get the game further developed. I plan on spending a lot of time studying, as I want to make sure my game is accurate and as good as it possibly can be.

    Any reccomendations or advice or any posotive or negative feedback would be appreciated. Please, before giving negative feedback, remember that I am in a very early stage of development, so I will fix and correct things, along with adding a multitude of them.
    Last edited by Rain; 04-05-2005, 10:56 PM.

    #2
    Re: My game in development

    So...I hope you have the whole thing plan out on why they would make a horse smarter...

    As for the main character, Eve, that should be very interesting. At least I think you are having her as the main character.

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      #3
      Re: My game in development

      Basically, yes.

      And they made her smarter as




      *A possible spoiler*









      a means of genetic testing. They're just getting into genetics, so they're seeing what they can do.

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        #4
        Re: My game in development

        What you have is a marvelous start: original, thought-provoking, interesting/intriguing, and (other adjectives, you get the point). This is definitely one of the best stories I've read online so far, so get working on it. I could comment on what I like specifically but won't bother unless you ask me to (which I don't mind), but there's nothing that caught my eye as needing improving (except for stuff you already pointed out like their personalities).

        You seem like you're somewhat new, so here's a good list of links to various RPGM1/2 related sites you may enjoy: http://williampaladin.tripod.com/id6.html

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          #5
          Re: My game in development

          Thank you very much


          Oh, and if you would point out any specific posotives or fallacies it would help me a lot
          Last edited by Azure-Neko; 03-30-2005, 11:08 PM.

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            #6
            Re: My game in development

            Okay.

            "The story begins with the Seventeenth general of Arcadia's Eastern front, Rigel, and his soldiers as they hold back the (eastern nation's) northwestern line." - A good actionous way to start the game.

            "The game will flow between two storylines that will eventually meet, though I am not entirely sure as to how yet." - A good way to make it more interesting and less predictable (if done well at least).

            "Eve is a shcizophrenic young girl. She has been raised in a labratory with medical facility as long as she can remember." - Definitely intriguing.

            "One day she sees one of the doctors operating on a horse. When she peeks closely through the window, she can see that the doctor is holding a knife in his hand, and the horse's muzzle had been cut." - Strange and interesting. How are you thinking of presenting this to the player?

            "She has an instantaneous reaction, but she is a smart child, so she remains quiet about the situation and tries to find the horse." - Believable and original, it's good to have smart characters who don't just act on impulse because most people in the world do think before doing stuff (and more so, people that play video games (a lot) more often than not are cautious people in real-life). I really like how you said, 'She has an instantaneous reaction, but she is a smart child, so she remains quiet about the situation' and decides to learn more before jumping to conclusions.

            For the technology, yours sounds like it's nothing like FF7 (tons of big huge robots, tons of firearms, explosives, lasers, motorcycles, trucks, cars, rockets, etc.) so I'd recommend not to say it is.

            "Even in the hands of a skilled marksman, guns lack the power of even guns in the Revolutionary era. They are hardly more powerful than bows, and less accurate." - This catches my eye as not making much sense. For say, why would anyone use a gun if they suck compared to longbows/shortbows/crossbows (and not to mention melee weapons)?

            "which takes around six years of study and practice to attain (talking about the gun usage)" - I don't really see how it could take a whole 6 years to learn how to load, aim, and fire a gun. Making it's complicated but usually using it's pretty easy (or at least not 6 years in-the-making).

            The Spoiler's great (I won't repost it or go into detail).

            I believe in medieval times in our world there was armor for horses (lighter stuff like ring mail). The higher officials would have their horses protected. The saddle shouldn't be the weapon, but the horseshoes makes perfect sense as the weapon. The horse as a party member is VERY interesting and original.

            (You didn't put Eve's equipment, just letting you know)

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              #7
              Re: My game in development

              Originally posted by WilliamKirk
              "One day she sees one of the doctors operating on a horse. When she peeks closely through the window, she can see that the doctor is holding a knife in his hand, and the horse's muzzle had been cut." - Strange and interesting. How are you thinking of presenting this to the player?
              I'm not entirely sure yet. I can't decide if the player should see the situation or just see Eve peeking through a window and hear a slashing sound.

              Originally posted by WilliamKirk
              "Even in the hands of a skilled marksman, guns lack the power of even guns in the Revolutionary era. They are hardly more powerful than bows, and less accurate." - This catches my eye as not making much sense. For say, why would anyone use a gun if they suck compared to longbows/shortbows/crossbows (and not to mention melee weapons)?
              They certainly don't suck compared to those weapons. Guns are just an extremely new and revolutionary discovery in the game, so they are far from developed into any level of guns seen in the past three centuries(think Arc the Lad or possibly Disgaea in terms of their power). The discovery of guns brings a discovery of what could be great power. The guns used in the game are mainly what you could think of as prototypes.


              "which takes around six years of study and practice to attain (talking about the gun usage)" - I don't really see how it could take a whole 6 years to learn how to load, aim, and fire a gun. Making it's complicated but usually using it's pretty easy (or at least not 6 years in-the-making).

              Being highly unheard of in the (world's) past, the government doesn't want anyone using a gun who doesn't know about every part of them. They are a new breed of weapon, and the government wants them to be in safe hands. Anyone who has the right to wield a firearm has the knowledge of making a gun, and has full knowledge of every aspect of the gun.

              Thanks, William


              And I'm sorry about the slow updating, I'm kind of leaving my game alone for just a bit to see how it plays out in my mind. I am getting a Dexdrive this weekend so I will be playing other's games, learning from them. So there might be a slight delay there, but I will continue working on my project over Spring Break(this next week)

              And I'm adding an update(just adding Eve's weapon. Thanks for pointing that out)

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                #8
                Re: My game in development

                I thought spring break was this past weekend...?
                "What if like...there was an exact copy of you somewhere, except they're the opposite gender, like you guys could literally have a freaky friday moment and nothing would change. Imagine the best friendship that could be found there."

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                  #9
                  Re: My game in development

                  Not where I live. Spring Break just started for me

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                    #10
                    Re: My game in development

                    Sounds interesting, I would like to have a fighting horse on my team.

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                      #11
                      Re: My game in development

                      ...I'm really thinking about putting this game on hold for a while.

                      It's so difficult for me. I'm really young and I've never made an RPG, or in any case, a game.

                      I don't want to end up screwing up what could be a great game because of lack of experience..

                      I think I'd be better off starting with a simpler game

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                        #12
                        Re: My game in development

                        True, thats what I'm doing, just make a simple game, get a handle of how to make the games, then do a bigger project later.

                        Also, you could always go back and make changes later.

                        I think it really helps to plan ahead also, brainstorm ideas for your story, and how you want to game to be presented with towns and dungeons and such. Basically get all your thoughts together before you even touch RPGM... at least thats what I think, I havent even made a game yet, so take that for what you will.

                        Even with the game I'm working on, even though it'll be a simple game, I have just been putting all my ideas in a notebook so I can sort them out when I start building the game. At times I stop to try something out to see if I can do what I'm planning. Right now I have a game with 2 dungeons, with 4 unbalanced main characters, and insainly hard bosses. That deadly blow move on the Overlord makes things pretty difficult.

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                          #13
                          Re: My game in development

                          http://www.pavilionboards.com/forum/...read.php?t=581

                          There's a lot of good stuff in there, good luck getting through what you can of it.

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                            #14
                            Re: My game in development

                            Yes, I've decided I'm going to put this game on hold. I'm having a lot of fun with the ideas, and I feel it could be a really good game..I just lack the experience neccesary to present it in an effecient way.

                            I will more than likely come back to build off of this game when I have more knowledge.

                            Thanks for all the advice

                            And William, that link helps a lot
                            Last edited by Rain; 04-05-2005, 10:47 PM.

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                              #15
                              Re: My game in development

                              In my experience, you can get some really great ideas for your "big project" if you let it sit for a while, so long as it comes to your mind from time to time.
                              "What if like...there was an exact copy of you somewhere, except they're the opposite gender, like you guys could literally have a freaky friday moment and nothing would change. Imagine the best friendship that could be found there."

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