What do you think?

[Jeremy]

The game I'm currently making is entitled the The Gibboradam. Written by Nephtoah, an infinite savant who gave birth to the world - he chronicles a rebellion in Heaven which scattered to the Earth in his revered vade mecum the Father Scrolls.

The prologue centers about an august inducement proclaimed through-out the land. The Preistess Sered rules over Eth Kazin and keeps the Father Scrolls ever near, adding her tears to the blood-written letters as she slowly renders the ancient manuscript. Her only speech was to institute the Gathering, an ambitious convergence of the most sapient and doughty into her kingdom.

Levi (the main character) is amused when he is entreated to this "orgy of fools" and sets off at once.

[irate giraffe]

Re: What do you think?

I'd love to comment on your ideas, but I really don't understand them.
Can you please dumb this down a bit for me--or maybe explain a bit further?
thanks-

[AbstractOrigin]

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Pretty well written!

Sounds like the premise of an intresting game.

[Vonwert]

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Well written, but makes no sense. At least to me.

[DYRE]

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So, what actually happens?

[Jeremy]

Re: What do you think?

Well i was deliberatly vague because I'm not sure exactly at what point in the plot i'm going to commence on - or how much background information i'm going to allow. But as it stands now this is how my game begins:

Visibly afflicted, the tortured presence of a youthful yet consumed vagrant emerges from the twilight path. His face encourages death - but for a dolent will trembling through his flesh.

He takes the passage Hammoth Dor - a timeless pagoda where worship of the Gibboradam endures. His desire is announced pure, wishing only to council the temple rector of an approaching peril. The sentinel distrustes him however and cruelly punishes the believed fraud.

Now the Gibboradam are bascially possessed humans - though they are evinced as heroes and conquerers by the benighted. Their bodies are chattels to the souls of the Fallen - the defeated incubus which Nephtoah chronicles when he writes of the thrawted rebellion in Heaven.

Sered learns of this and is terrified of retribution by Heaven. It is also her apprehension the pedagogue of souls (the one who lead the rebellion) has been reborn on earth - and seeks his rightful dominion over the spirits of his slain desciples. This is the reason for her "Gathering", the ambitous convergence of the world's most ingenious and thoritative figures. In this way she beseeches to bring about a solution to the transpiring chaos.

[Jeremy]

Re: What do you think?

Not sure what that means - do you like the story so far?