Hey... I am back and....

[Trebsay]

New story idea....

Like my many failed... I wonder how good this one might be? I started a bit.

This is the brief storyline.

You are sent out by your small village to represent them, In this time to represent a town, city or village. You must fight, And set on a quest to cause great good. Why do they fight? Thats a big secret ( learns more later )

You travel a bit, blah, blah, blah... ( ill get back to this mostly fighting and areas )

This is where in my opion the storyline gets major. As you warp to a town, There is a Video, Where Flashs keep flashing. You faint, And when you wake up someone else thoughts are in your head, You try to fight what they tell you but its hard. You are possesed.

This is really the breif storyline, If you want i could put the long one... I am still thinking abit about the flaws and ideas!

Also what do you think i should do?

[Jamos' Old Account]

Re: Hey... I am back and....

You travel a bit, blah, blah, blah... ( ill get back to this mostly fighting and areas )

It is kind of a bad sign when you start explaining a story with "blah." You should probably be a little more specific. From what you have here it seems like you have a long ways to go, but you said it was brief so I can't correctly come to that conclusion. Good luck with your idea.

EDIT: Here is a short example of a way to describe the basics of a story. "In the world of Toilet, ace detective Crappy McGee is investigating the disapearances of the turdlings. Soon he uncovers the crappy truth about what became of them. The evil mastermind, Shiddy Smiggety, has flushed the poor turdlings in a bizarre experiment. Now he holds Toilet for ransom, threatening to flush everyone. Can Crappy Mcgee stop this smelly plot, or is all of Toilet doomed?"

This isn't a very good example, but I hope this gives a general idea of how to do a short explanation.

[Trebsay]

Re: Hey... I am back and....

i see what you mean... I just didnt feel like saying the fighting part when its not really completed... I am still working on it. I have to get farther to make an explainaition like that.

[MagusMartovich]

Re: Hey... I am back and....

...so your main character is posessed? Or is he/she/it a little insane (like Cloud/FF7)? Are you being controlled/used (FF3/FF6)? Am I to think zombies or ghosts or something all together different? I think that you quick explanation was more than enough to make me want to learn more, and possibly play the game should it ever be finished! Way to go!!!