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    #1

    hows this idea sound?

    ok the name will be Hell's Deception. Its about a half-demon who works as an assasain in hell. Lucifer offers him a job to kill 666 listed men and after Armegeden Daemeon,the half-demon,will rule over Earth.the game takes place when Daemeon goes to Earth to kill the last target,a man named Sin.After an extended story Daemeon finds out that the whole time Sin has been hired to kill him instead because Lucifer dosen't want to give Daemeon his reward. So Daemeon sets off to Hell to kill Lucifer. Afterwards the whole universe is destroyed because it can't exist without good and evil,God and Devil.....thats rite no happy ending. so let me no wut u think
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    Re: hows this idea sound?

    Umn..sounds cliche and over done, plus it's hard to make out the grammer.

    What do you have for characters? What kinda battle type? Magic? Need alot more to make any good judgement on this one.

    And the thing that makes it most undesireably to me is the fact that it's the name Daemon. Try something diffrent and not so cliche.

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      #3
      Re: hows this idea sound?

      I too think it sounds cliche... Don't get me wrong, though. I do think it has some promise, but somethings are needed to be worked out. Work with the story and change somethings around. Actually, doing that can bring forth some new ideas.

      PS: You really shouldn't tell the ending. It can ruins the game for some people.
      I had to change accounts. I'm here now - http://www.pavilionboards.com/forum/member.php?u=1475

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        #4
        Re: hows this idea sound?

        thnx. its still in the process so i will rethink a lot of it.
        really thnx for the review tho

        p.s. i only told the ending so u could c wut the whole story would be

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          #5
          Re: hows this idea sound?

          *shrugs* I guess I'm just too use to having people do the whole "Lucifer" substory. I still just don't personally dig the story. Prolly like I mentioned earlier. The name Daemon in any demon-based story just turns me off.

          You can always try to look for a comperable (can't spell) one at sites like www.behindthename.com

          The story needs alot of work. I'd like to see a more comprehensible summary of it minus the internet speak. I'm not trying to insult you, but I cannot take a poster serious if they can't type out everything. Sorreh.

          What are some of your ideas for magic?

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