Anyone want to critique an essay of mine?

[jvrlopez]

The topic is an argument for or against the following idea-

"Racial, ethnic or religious profiling makes the world more secure."

It's about 3/5s done and I would appreciate any help or suggestions you may have.

PM me for what I have so far, thanks!

~javier

[jvrlopez]

Re: Anyone want to critique an essay of mine?

[The Dark Jester]

Re: Anyone want to critique an essay of mine?

PM you with what?

YAHOO?

the only yahoo sn i have of yours is bobdylansmugglesplumbs.com

[jvrlopez]

Re: Anyone want to critique an essay of mine?

Click on my username and select, "Send a private message to Jvrlopez....DUR

[MagusMartovich]

Re: Anyone want to critique an essay of mine?

Click on my username and select, "Send a private message to Jvrlopez....DUR

Look, just cuz you think you're all high and mighty with your couple thousand posts don't take it out on the new guys who don't totally understand the way things work! I'd bet most of the people that come to this site are juggling at least a job if not school as well and don't have hours upon hours of free time on their hands to put off doing actual work and instead go online to the RPGMaker PAvilion and ask people for their opinions on a subject that isn't really even able to be discussed in the real world. I submit to you, therefore, that YOU have a lot of nerve!

[Manyak]

Re: Anyone want to critique an essay of mine?

Look, just cuz you think you're all high and mighty with your couple thousand posts don't take it out on the new guys who don't totally understand the way things work! I'd bet most of the people that come to this site are juggling at least a job if not school as well and don't have hours upon hours of free time on their hands to put off doing actual work and instead go online to the RPGMaker PAvilion and ask people for their opinions on a subject that isn't really even able to be discussed in the real world. I submit to you, therefore, that YOU have a lot of nerve!

**** you and die.

[Redneck 2000]

Re: Anyone want to critique an essay of mine?

Look, just cuz you think you're all high and mighty with your couple thousand posts don't take it out on the new guys who don't totally understand the way things work! I'd bet most of the people that come to this site are juggling at least a job if not school as well and don't have hours upon hours of free time on their hands to put off doing actual work and instead go online to the RPGMaker PAvilion and ask people for their opinions on a subject that isn't really even able to be discussed in the real world. I submit to you, therefore, that YOU have a lot of nerve!

yo yo yo wut up wut up wut up magus wut up in this

[jvrlopez]

Re: Anyone want to critique an essay of mine?

Look, just cuz you think you're all high and mighty with your couple thousand posts don't take it out on the new guys who don't totally understand the way things work! I'd bet most of the people that come to this site are juggling at least a job if not school as well and don't have hours upon hours of free time on their hands to put off doing actual work and instead go online to the RPGMaker PAvilion and ask people for their opinions on a subject that isn't really even able to be discussed in the real world. I submit to you, therefore, that YOU have a lot of nerve!

Firstly, don't act like I post here every ****ing minute of the day. My thousand posts only came over the course of a year, not a month or a week. There are many more people with just as many posts as I and we all average just a few or so a day. I don't know how you manage to speculate that I'm "high and mighty" just because I have a "couple thousand posts." I've never cared about my post count, nor does anyone, I'm sure. Its just some trivial number.

And picking on "New guys"? Jester has been here for over a year and I was pretty shocked to note that he didn't know of the site's PMer. And it doesnt take "hours upon hours" to notice the PM seeing as its in your User CP page when you log in.

Finally, I was just asking for some pointers on my writing style, not their opinion on the topic. I surely didn't expect for you to explode and come off as bitchy and whiny as you did.

If anything, you're the one who comes off as high and mighty, with your, "I'm better since I have so much more to do than you" attitude.

[The Dark Jester]

Re: Anyone want to critique an essay of mine?

Ive been here for well over a year....I wish I could remember how long. =/

[John Mora]

Re: Anyone want to critique an essay of mine?

Why can't you just post it on the INTERWEB?

[jvrlopez]

Re: Anyone want to critique an essay of mine?

IT'LL GET STOLEN AND FLAMED FOR ITS LIBERAL VIEWS!#!~)@I~!

I don't really care that much anymore, seeing as I've given it to two English teachers and my Creative Writing teacher. I was just hoping for some peer opinions on my writing.

OH WELL.

[Magus]

Re: Anyone want to critique an essay of mine?

Peers are idiots.

[Czechs Mex]

Re: Anyone want to critique an essay of mine?

I, good sir, will critique your essay.

[Snarf]

Re: Anyone want to critique an essay of mine?

I would like to read it.

[jvrlopez]

Re: Anyone want to critique an essay of mine?

Ahh forget it.