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    My story Rate it or give suggestions

    Zoroth: The legend of Arod

    There was Dragon named Arod that romed the lands causing horor and panic. Then two young men Rathman and Izman who defeated it. The Dragon soul was then trappen in the underworld.

    ......................
    50 years later.

    The dragons soul has escaped and Arod is out but stronger than ever. Rathman and Izman's sons named after them set out in hopes of killing Arod. They meet a girl called Dora. Rathman falls madly in love with her. They figure out that Dora created Arod and named it her name backwards. The only way to kill Arod befor he destroys Zoroth is to kill Dora.
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    Re: My story Rate it or give suggestions

    Just by that decription I can tell what happens in the story afterwards, unless you have some plot twists. I would say that the name reverce is kinda corny, it worked for Dracula, Alucard so it may work for you.

    Give them Last names so we know if they are related or not. Or do you find out later that they are?

    Many things left unexplained, but that is a good thing.

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      #3
      Re: My story Rate it or give suggestions

      Put more detail into it.
      Games:

      SS World (RPGM2) Extravaganzicon Contest Winner
      A Ronin Story (RPGM3)
      SS World 2 (RPGM2)

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        #4
        Re: My story Rate it or give suggestions

        Well I was guessing this was a RPGM idea (Since it is not in the Imaginari section) More details is nice unless you want us to be suprised about how the history and such.

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          #5
          Re: My story Rate it or give suggestions

          well auctually the ending you guessed is wrong.

          Do you play monster Hunter Reddragon??

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            #6
            Re: My story Rate it or give suggestions

            *off topic*

            No i just use MH2 screenshots in my siggy for the heck of it

            Look in the Video Games section of the Pav to find other members here that do. On MH Online i'm DrakeDragonfire

            *end of off topic*

            Who here has guessed the ending? All i said was that Arod and Dora is kinda corney, but implemented right it may work.

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              #7
              Re: My story Rate it or give suggestions

              Umm...he wimps out, Dora lives, pwns the dragon anyway, and they live happily ever after?

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