This is actually the beginning of a sequel story, but I have written it in a way that you don't have to read the predecessor. Just wanted to know if anyone has anythign to say about the short intro chapter. A lot of my other stuff can be found at www.fictionpress.com/~ziegrauros. I will post some of that here eventually, and if people seem to like it I will update more often. Thanks in advance and here's the story.
Another Beginning
“Dad!!!” yelled a young brown-haired boy. He was running across the yard from a cemetery next to the house that stood partially in a grove of trees.
The boys father was sitting in a beach chair about 30 yards from the house, with a radio playing next to him. He had sunglasses on and his blue hair was in a messy ponytail. A few locks that did escape formed natural spikes that hung in front of his glasses.
“Dad!” the boy said again, now standing next to his fathers chair.
“Yeah, what is it Dan?” his father asked, looking over at him.
“I'm done, you said once I finished it all, we could go see Blaze and Naly and River and Quint!”
The boys father sighed at his son's persistence. He looked at his son. He was about to turn 14 soon, but he still loved hanging out with his 'cousins', 3 years younger than him. He had deep blue eyes, from his real mother, and the same tidy brown hair. The man then gave the usual father response, that brings delight to every child's ears.
“Go ask your mother.”
“MOM!!!” yelled the boy from right next to his father, before setting out to run toward the house.
The boys father went back to relaxing, putting his hands behind his head and closing his eyes.
“Dear!” yelled a woman from the house. She walked out, wearing jeans and a black shirt. Her short black hair was hanging loose and almost covering her eyes.
“Yes honey?” replied her husband, looking back at his wife and son.
“You promised to take Dan to see his cousins when he was done, right?”
“Yeah.”
“Then why aren't you?”
“I wanted to make sure it was ok with you.” a sly smirk crossed the mans face. The woman glared back. “Fine, let's go.”
“YAY!!!” yelled the boy, earning a look from his mother and father.
Another Beginning
“Dad!!!” yelled a young brown-haired boy. He was running across the yard from a cemetery next to the house that stood partially in a grove of trees.
The boys father was sitting in a beach chair about 30 yards from the house, with a radio playing next to him. He had sunglasses on and his blue hair was in a messy ponytail. A few locks that did escape formed natural spikes that hung in front of his glasses.
“Dad!” the boy said again, now standing next to his fathers chair.
“Yeah, what is it Dan?” his father asked, looking over at him.
“I'm done, you said once I finished it all, we could go see Blaze and Naly and River and Quint!”
The boys father sighed at his son's persistence. He looked at his son. He was about to turn 14 soon, but he still loved hanging out with his 'cousins', 3 years younger than him. He had deep blue eyes, from his real mother, and the same tidy brown hair. The man then gave the usual father response, that brings delight to every child's ears.
“Go ask your mother.”
“MOM!!!” yelled the boy from right next to his father, before setting out to run toward the house.
The boys father went back to relaxing, putting his hands behind his head and closing his eyes.
“Dear!” yelled a woman from the house. She walked out, wearing jeans and a black shirt. Her short black hair was hanging loose and almost covering her eyes.
“Yes honey?” replied her husband, looking back at his wife and son.
“You promised to take Dan to see his cousins when he was done, right?”
“Yeah.”
“Then why aren't you?”
“I wanted to make sure it was ok with you.” a sly smirk crossed the mans face. The woman glared back. “Fine, let's go.”
“YAY!!!” yelled the boy, earning a look from his mother and father.
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