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[Virus Chris]

I'm going to make a game called, "Chris the Legendary Hero: Journey of Worlds"

In this game you play as a boy named Chris (you change his name to be yours or any name you want) who's a reincarntion of an ancient hero that must save the world of "Magic Quest World" from the evil VirusMonsters that want to destroy everything. At the start of the game you begin playing as Chris fighting DarkBlade (A Super Elite VirusMonster) and Nexus (the hero's evil look-alike which you learn more about as the story goes on). After chipping away half of one or both their health, the master of the VirusMonsters in the Dark World watchs and plans something and talks about some ritual by using three stong souls of other worlds. Then three swirls of light appear in the sky appear Chris, DarkBlade, and Nexus and three different colored light get shattered around some parts of the world, with one that falls on top of Chris. From here on end Chris and the other heroes (which he teams up later) go on a journey to help the heroes return home and stop the VirusMonsters' evil plan to destroy the world and other worlds too. And in some point of the game you switch between Chris and George, who is the reincarntion of the second Legendary Hero and battle against the VirusMonsters by himself. The plot gets darker and darker as you play. :)

Here's what's feature in my game:

- Special guest stars
- Switching between the main hero and George

Can't think of anything right now, but what do you think of my game?

PS: I hope I don't get in trouble with these special guest star, but I really like to have them in my game. :D

[Jamos' Old Account]

I will be honest, it needs a little work. With enough work you can turn this into a pretty sweet game. The premise is okay so far and I like the name Nexus (I don't know why.) Now, I can understand why you named the main character Chris, but why George? Is he a name of a friend you're including or what? If not I would suggest a different name.

BTW, I doubt special quest stars will get you in trouble (unless if you use Tom Cruise.)

[Virus Chris]

I will be honest, it needs a little work. With enough work you can turn this into a pretty sweet game. The premise is okay so far and I like the name Nexus (I don't know why.) Now, I can understand why you named the main character Chris, but why George? Is he a name of a friend you're including or what? If not I would suggest a different name.

BTW, I doubt special quest stars will get you in trouble (unless if you use Tom Cruise.)

Thanks for your opinion and I know it needs a little more work, I just sometimes have a bit of a hard time trying to say or type in this matter how to tell about my game and I don't what to spoil too much of my game. I named that character's name George, because he's my cousin George (distant cousin actually) that lives in Flordia now and I wanted him to be in my game since we're the best of friends. The reason I named one of the villains Nexus is because I wanted to give my character a very unique name that you normally wouldn't hear everyday and that's why he's name is Nexus (and also Nexus, the hero's look-alike, has purple skin and red eyes and in the game it tells you why he looks like that). I'm glad that I won't be in trouble with some special guest stars, thank you for telling me that. :)

[Draygone]

Maybe an intesting variation of George can be made. Like, Geroge.

[Red Dragon]

Duh George W Bush!

[Virus Chris]

I put in an input character name event for George if you don't like to have my character's name called this. :D

[Manyak]

There a few things that I don't think add up in your game...

I just think that it's kind of strange that there's an "ancient hero" while everything else sounds futuristic and modern.

To me, "Srong Souls" sounds pretty much like a ripoff of every RPG game where you have to collect the "essence" of something or where you have to find fragments of some greater whole.

The plot seems really cliché, I mean, some things trying to destroy the world? Been there done that.

And I just have a suspicon that you want to use these "special guest characters" to try and leech success off of other games instead of making your game equally noteworthy.

I dunno, just something to think about.

[The Dark Jester]

Magic Quest World=Horrible name.

Why do the monsters want to destroy everything?

I really don't like a lot of your names they all seem terribly generic, Nexus is alright.

What is the setting?

Medeivel?

why are they called Virusmonsters?

Whats their backstory?

I find the plot paper thin and quite cliche.

It kinda seems like theres no point to the adventure except for adventures sake.

[Redneck 2000]

Why would you post this game idea? It sounds to me like you haven't fleshed it out at all, and are just saying the first things that come to your mind when you think of a game plot. What kind of constructive criticism or even comments do you expect people to say when the idea is in such a primitive stage? I like to think that people on this, the official RPG Maker board, take themselves pretty seriously when it comes to game ideas, and coming to the table with something like this isn't exactly setting yourself up for success.

For instance, "Magic Quest World" isn't even the name for a world. I mean, is that an honest attempt at a name or just something you thought of when you were half-heartedly coming up with plot elements? That sounds more like a description of the world than a proper name. This is really just an allegory for the vast number of problems apparent to even someone taking the quickest of looks at your plot.

If you ever want your game ideas to really become something in the RPG Maker community, you should put some more thoughts and time into them before you unleash them haphazardly unto the public, especially when the public is the biggest RPGM community on the net. I don't know a nicer way to say this, but it definitely needs work.

[Caciss]

My rating: Boring out of 10

Perhaps it's because you didn't voice your idea very clearly, but the plot seems pretty blah blah blah. Really cliche, and really boring. The player wants to be dragged into the plot, and unless you have a sweet ass battle system or something, it's gonna be a bore.

I'd suggest going through it and fleshing the story out. Explain why these things are happening, where these spirits come from, so on and so forth.

Y'know?

[Libby]

It's a good structure to stand on, but I feel if this is all your game is made up of, your raft might sink. I have the same problem too, with my story being a bit cliche, but I actually ran a few story ideas (the full story, + spoilers) to a person I met on the pavilion, and it really helped me figure out a few things.. (BTW, Jest, I figured out where she came from. Thanks for the help)

I would change the name of the world to save for that cringing feeling every gamer will have from reading it, and I might allow for a name change of the title. It sounds too..forced if you get my drift. the Journey of Worlds doesn't sound to bad, but the "Chris the Legendary Hero" kinda makes me want to close the thread and look somewhere else. Also, I know you feel that Nexes is not a name you hear everyday, but take it from someone who has been sucking on the fantasy teet for all 24 years of her life. Nexes is one of the most overused names in any sort of fantasy/sci-fi game/movie/book/comic/anime/ect. I am not debunking you for using it, I'm just warning you that it's not as uncommon as you may think.

Also, the VirusMonster's names sound a bit juvinile. I'm not downing them, I'm just giving my honest opinion. here are a few quotes from past posts that might give you a good idea for places to find names - (I hope you guys don't mind me quoting you!)
As for the whole naming problem, I find it helps to take a phrase describing the thing to be named, then translate it to Japanese. (I use http://babelfish.altavista.com.) Other languages work too, as long as you screen names before use (Auf Widershin is not a great character name.) For example, the main character in my game is Kitai (japanese for honor).
Hope that helps!

I like to use http://www.behindthename.com. Currently most of the names I have been using have been from people I know, or things that come to mind. Like the name of the town "Christopher." is not changing, but it just came to mind.

I just discovered a wonderful source of names.

The PDR! (Physicians Desk Reference)

It lists thousands of names of pharmaceuticals. Some actually work surprisingly well.


I hope my too long post helps a bit. I understand the frustration of not knowing what to do with a story.

Edited for Tagginess.

[Jamos' Old Account]

Virus Chris, I hope you came up with more to the plot by now. What you have was okay to start out with, but it needs much more. I believe any idea can be a great one with enough work. You do need to change the name of the world. It is kind of like calling Earth; "Multicultural Conflictional World."
The Virusmonsters seem to not have a reason to destroy everything. Are they just mindless creatures that just eat everything they see? Don't think that I am trying to bring you down, though. I am just trying to help you out.
Good luck.

[ichabod]

rate my game guys. Its based off section 1 of the novel i wrote. It is called cesius. His sister gets kidnapped by dante. it is his job to destroy dante and save his sister. He has many struggles on the way though. He must fight evil beasts. :D

[Libby]

rate my game guys. Its based off section 1 of the novel i wrote. It is called cesius. His sister gets kidnapped by dante. it is his job to destroy dante and save his sister. He has many struggles on the way though. He must fight evil beasts. :D

Make your own thread. You can get in trouble with the Mods if you hijack someone else's thread!

[John Mora]

I'll rate your game when you make it.

[ichabod]

oh by the way i didnt hijak this thread. If u came in u should of read "rate my game" so im asking u guys to rate mine.

[Valkysas]

yes you did. this is someone else's topic. make your own.

[ichabod]

but wont it be kind of dumb to have two threads with rate my game?





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[Draygone]

This isn't a general Rate My Game topic. Virus was asking people to rate his game, specifically.

[ichabod]

i am doing the same thing

[Valkysas]

Make your own topic for your own game.

[Draygone]

This is Virus's topic. Not everyone's. Just Virus's. For his game. Make a topic about your game. Please.

[ichabod]

okay then sounds good





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[Virus Chris]

I'm been reading your guys messages and sorry for giving only a brief statement about my story. It was probably because I wasn't clear enough on my game and I don't won't to spoiler my whole game, but I'll tell you about the story of my game, but later I'm kind of busy so I'll tell you tomorrow. See ya later. :)

[Hedrum]

Here's what's feature in my game:

- Special guest stars
- Switching between the main hero and George



Oh wow, that's so few features in this game. You need to build up on the features.

The plot gets darker and darker as you play.

Okay, if this so-called plot is suppose to get even darker, I pressume that you're taking this plot seriously. Which is quite ridiculous seeing how this "plot" seems more like a comedy than a dark tale. If the game's not about the plot, then the actual game-play needs to capture the player's eyes. I don't mind a cheesy story in a game (since, you know, there are so many games that have em'), but the game still needs to be fun.

[Virus Chris]

OK here I go (SPOILER WARNING! I'M GOING TO TELL THE WHOLE STORY OF MY GAME WHICH WELL SPOILER THE WHOLE THING SO READ IF YOU WANT AND MAYBE GIVE ME A FEEDBACK):

My game is called "Chris the Legendary Hero: Jounrey of Worlds". After the prologue you go to the name input screen to change the main character's name to be yours or anything you want to call the character or keep it as is, after that the main character talks to DarkBlade, a Super Elite VirusMonster, and Nexus, the hero's evil look-alike and after a they have a chat the hero enters a battle with them. After you defeat DarkBlade and Nexus you go into a cutscene, after the continue to fight, where the Master of the VirusMonster is watching them from afar and talks about a plan and then uses a World Portal, which allows a person (more than one of course) to enter other worlds, and then you go back the main hero and the villains. After a tiresome battle the skies fill with three swirling lights and then a girl appears in front of the hero. The girl introduces herself to the hero (I'm not to going to tell you who the special guests are, you just have to play my game and see) and DarkBlade is wondering where this girl came from and Nexus tells him that they have left right now. DarkBlade is furious about this because he wants to kill the hero no matter what but Nexus tells him to leave now and he'll explain why. DarkBlade still steaming vows to come back and personally kill him and both DarkBlade and Nexus leave. The girl wonders what's going and ask why the one called Nexus looks like the hero and the hero says that they need to go to Heaven City and find out what's going on around here. When you go to Heaven City the hero tells the girl that they should get to Seemore's house (the house with the only red roof) and discuss about the problem here. After you go into Seemore's house Seemore greets the hero back home and then the hero explains about the girl that just appear out of nowhere right after the sky was filled with three swirling lights. Seemore thinks that the girl was brought here by a World Portal and possible a VirusMonster did this, but isn't sure why. The girl asks what VirusMonsters are and Seemore explains that they are evil monsters that appeared in their world "Magic Quest World" 500 years ago and attack everyone and destroyed all the demons in this world (who were friends with the humans) and starting killing off the humans. The girl asked why and Seemore said he wasn't sure and then saids that two heroes appeared and fought and sealed the evil monsters away forever, but the seal didn't last and broke 500 years later. The hero saids that's when a World Portal swallowed him up and send him here, but wasn't sure who sent him. The girl saids that's horrible and saids why everybody here calls their world "Magic Quest World" and Seemore replies that this is a world where people go on magical quest and go into other worlds as well, that's why. A bit confuse the girl ask if he can send her hime, but Seemore cannot and nor can the hero since both of them don't know how do perform a World Portal, because nobody taught them to do it. Sad that she is unable to go back home the hero ask where he can find a master or a place where he can learn the World Portal ability so he can send the girl back home. The girl becomes happy and Seemore saids that Crystal City is where they should go, but first they should get some rest. After taking a nap the hero and the girl leave Heaven City to go to Crystal City (not after a tutorial that I'm working on), but first needs to go to the closest town where they can buy a lot of supplies first and the hero warns the girl about the VirusMonster wondering around here and gives her a weapon to protect herself from the VirusMonsters. After reaching Aura City from crossing the Grass Plains the hero and the girl go to the inn to get some sleep.

Now after the cutscene with the two heroes you go to another city "Tech City" where it is being attacked by the VirusMonsters. Then another hero appears seeing all the destruction the VirusMonsters cause and three of them come and attack the second hero, but before this a name input screen appears again and then you fight the deadly trio. After the fight the second hero goes and searches for the head honco of the group of VirusMonsters (also when playing as the second hero you cannot save unless you find a yellow crystal save point). After finding the leader of the group the second hero asks why he's doing this and Metal Chameleon says that he needs to have all the humans leave the city while he was searching for something that he doesn't the humans want to find. The second hero asks what it is and why the VirusMonsters are not killing the humans and Metal Chameleon tells him that they have their reasons and both of them fight. After defeating one of the eight elite VirusMonsters, Metal Chameleon saids that he's already found what he was looking for and send it to his master before the second hero found him and tells him the humans well get what they deserve and after fing the three keys and turns into black dust (that's how VirusMonsters die). Confused at what the VirusMonster said the second hero leaves the city where the humans are coming back to fix it and the second hero goes to find out what thee VirusMonsters are planing.


I'll tell you more tomorrow. See ya later!

[Virus Chris]

Sorry for not posting the next part of my story, I'm been busy.


Back to the first hero, both heroes are both rested and ready to got to the next town "Magic Town" where they can get information to where Crystal City is (Seemore tells them to go here since he doesn't remember where the city was again). After taking the long route that was filled with VirusRaptors (another kind of VirusMonster) to Magic Town both heroes made it, but to find some trouble there. Someone has stolen all the weapons, food, and medince there and nobody doesn't know what to do. The chief of the town comes up to the hero and his friend and asked them for help to find the culprit. The chief says that he will help them hero with anything if he can find the culprit. The heroes agreed to help and go on a search for the thief (during this time you cannot leave the city until the task is done). After searching the town and getting all the clues to who did you corner the thief and ask for the stuff back. The thief apolgizes for stealing, but did it to help her family in the Mountain village for don't have any weapons, food, and medince to help them there. The hero promises to deliver some weapons, food, and medince for the girl's family in the mountains as soon as he can and goes to the chief to give the stolen goods back and get information to where the Crystal City is. After setting out through Demon Forest to get to Crystal City, the other hero ask what this place is and the main hero replies that this was the home to demons which live peacefully alongside humans until the VirusMonster came and wiped them all out. After the finishing his story the two heroes heard a scream and a little boy comes running. The boy said that these two black monsters are chasing him and doesn't seem to be no match for them and then the two VirusMonster attack them. After defeating the VirusMonsters the boy introduce himself and tells what happn to him when a swirling light swallowed him up and joins the party. Then after navigating through the forest and when you reach the end the the three heroes are attack by a huge VirusDragon. After defeating the VirusMonster and leave the forest, the gang enters Breeze Town for some rest and relaxation.

You go back to the second hero investigating a cave where some of them VirusMonsters were spotting going in. After the hero complains at how long it took him to find them, he goes in to search for the vile monsters and found out what their plans are. Reaching the end if the first area a huge boulder with the VirusMonster symbol on it and is blocking the hero's way. In order to get to the next area the hero has to search for the an object in the cave that can destroy the boulder, which with his own powers he can't destroy. After finding the object and destroy the boulder (along with the object) the hero continues to the next area where he has to solve some puzzles to get to the very end. At the end of the cave the hero confronts the two other elite VirusMonsters Sucker (a VirusMonster that the hero makes fun of, because of its name) and Virus Thundermon. After a few trash talks the hero battles the two VirusMonsters at the same time (warning! You must be a very high level to fight these VirusMonsters, because both can hurt your hero fast and hard). After defeating the two elites (with some difficulty) the hero asks what the VirusMonsters are planning, but both of them reply that what their planning will change the world and something else as well, but don't revel it and both of them vanish. Frustrated the second hero leaves and goes looking for the VirusMonsters again to stop their evil plan.

[rexstar167]

Virus Chris is one of my close friends and we go to school together. I got to play what he has done in his game and i find it real good for the first game he ever made on RPG maker XP. You don't need to use the names Chris or george because you can change them. the villians (virus monsters) are all pretty decent. The basic virus monster seems to seem basic but his final bosses like Virus Dark Yoshi looks pretty cool and looks like the oppisite of Yoshi. I'm looking forward to the completion of the game and hope to be the first to play the final prodect in which he will be able to play the final product of my game called "The Forgotton Warrior". Virus Chris does an ausome job and i got the whole story in my head and it's going to be exciting. There is going to be some interesting battles in this game which I have not tried yet. Yes, his story has it's problems but it's his first one so give him a brake. I try to correct him on some of his mistakes but i don't see all the mistakes and that is when you guys come in. Or sometimes he just dosen't listen. His story is going to be good and thats all I have to say. :D

[Virus Chris]

Thank you Rexter! I'll continue telling the story of my game later, because I'm working on my game right now. So see you guys later!

[Red Dragon]

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