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    What my game will be

    I hope I put this in the correct place.

    My upcoming game (which does not have a name yet)[I could use some suggestions] will be my first. I just wanted to know if you guys thought it would be a good game.

    It starts with a kid named Spectre who goes to school one day and some bullies chase him. After a while he runs outside were it starts to thunder really bad so all of them rush back into the school. It is a fight training school. They begin chasing him in there when Spectre decides to challenge the bullies leader at a big tournament coming up. He accepts and they leave him alone. They have to remain at school for a really long time because of the thunder storm and Spectre finds a cool stone. He asks his teacher about it and his teacher tells him that it holds the power of an old legendary warrior from a different world. But it isn't true it is just a really old stone. His teacher says it is his but gives it to Spectre anyway.

    The Next day they go on a field trip to help set up for the coming tournament. The people who are in the tournament do not have to set up but have to practice. Spectre talks about his fathers 2nd place matches every year to the other kids who are in the tournament. He leanrs that the only person his father loses to is the bullies dad. After a while he learns that the bully is not so mean and they become friends. They then take on the other bullies who are picking on the other kids. Then after about two hours of being there these odd big robot looking blue men attack. Spectre takes up to fight them but did not last.

    He woke up the next day and every one thought he had destroyed the robot. They said he shot it with a fire blast that was really big and it was destroyed. When he went to go see the TV he noticed it wasn't him but a person he had seen once. The person had helped the guards catch some people who were trying to kill the emperer. He tried explaining it but no one would listen. Before long They were under attack by barbarian people. Spectre wanted to help fight but his parents wouldn't let him. He left during the night and joined the soldiers in there battle. After a couple of battles he noticed he wasn't very strong against them but wanted to keep going any way. He was part of Soldier group seven who then met up with Soldier group one were he saw the person who had destroyed the Robot looking blue people. He has a dream that night of a ship and many spiders attacking it. He blew himself up to save them with a move that got rid of all enemy's in an area. HE then floated off to earth.

    When he woke up he though to himself who was he really. He alked to the person who killed the robot blue people and learned his name was Vector. Vector was definatley hiding something but spectre couldn't figure it out. Later he figured out he was from this barbaric tribe that was figting him. So he decides to join them. After a little while he notices that they are being controlled by an evil monster controller. He then gets the barbaric people to help the other people fight off this evil person. Before long he learns to fly and goes off in space were he finds the evil persons base. He ccidently finds the spaceship in his dream and notices a red one too. The spaceships start fghting and the evil ones ship is destroyed. The red one and white one are still duking it out when Spectre decides to help the white one from his dream and sneeks onto the red one. Here he finds out about a conspiracy and gets in good terms with it's leader. He stops the fighting goes back to earth asks Vector again and tells Vector what he saw in space and Vector tells him the truth. He learns that he is a legendary warrior and that Vector had done the same before him. Then he meats up with his old friends from back then but decides to stay back on earth with his family he had had for the last few years. The story is spread around the world and he gets famous but refuses to be known like this so he runs away to a cabin far away.

    Then it's time for a sequal that I have not thought of yet.

    So what do you think. Oh and if you want to help with name a few things are his friends from space names are Linny and Zack. The Spaceships name is Holy Phoenix. And Linny joined up with the Red army after he saved them from the spiders in search of her father who supposedly the leader of the red army knew. There are a few other things besides this that will be added in but this is the main stuff. Although I am not sure how good I can do the space stuff or TV in RPG Maker 3 But I will find a way. It is suppose to be kinda old with a few futuristic things added into it.
    I was like a Cloud once!!!!

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    Re: What my game will be

    I'll be honest.

    Your story needs a bit of work. But more then that, it needs background and history. Why exactly is there an Emperor? How can someone just automaticly know a stone posses the spirit of a warrior from another demension? Why is it people were so shocked by a giant fireball (is there no magic in this world?)? Why is this kid in a school for Warriors? Don't people believe in actuall education?

    Just little things like that. They add depth and meaning to places you create.

    Another thing, I don't like your main character. He has no meaning, no purpose... No reason to be the main hero. He is too arbitrary. You need to ask yourself, why is he the hero? What makes him unique?

    Just polish the story up a bit and you can have something nice. =)

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      #3
      Re: What my game will be

      How can someone just automaticly know a stone posses the spirit of a warrior from another demension?
      his teacher tells him that it holds the power of an old legendary warrior from a different world. But it isn't true it is just a really old stone.
      There 'ya go.
      "What if like...there was an exact copy of you somewhere, except they're the opposite gender, like you guys could literally have a freaky friday moment and nothing would change. Imagine the best friendship that could be found there."

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        #4
        Re: What my game will be

        Yeah I figured it would need more work. I will work on fixing these things as soon as I get a chance.

        More background history.
        I was like a Cloud once!!!!

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          #5
          Re: What my game will be

          just a little more thought and you've got something. i'd check it out.
          the legends have returned...whenever i can finish these, lol.

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            #6
            Re: What my game will be

            It seems like you've put a lot of things in there because you want them rather than because they fit in the story. You don't have to take anything out (unless RM3 cant' do it) just find a way to pull everything together so it doesn't seem like a random mix of events. I'd like to see it when you revise it some, because this rough sketch is hard to understand. It'll make more sense once you come up with more of the names and details rather than "He then gets the barbaric people to help the other people fight off this evil person." Anyway, it's a good start. You've got good stuff just maybe a little too much of it.
            I want that Mulan McNugget sauce, Morty!

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