My Star Wars story

[MisterManigation]

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[MisterManigation]

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[MisterManigation]

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[Alex]

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Is English your first language?

[Tex Ritter]

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Seems kind of like some geeky 7th grader wrote it during study hall.

There are a lot of things wrong with it, but to start off I'd suggest you use your own setting and ideas.

[Sejon]

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Stars emitted the blackness of what is space

Stars emit blackness? Wha?

[Caciss]

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I guess he's whiney too.

[Alex]

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Please don't kill yourself, MisterManigation.

[highwind]

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Musta been a pretty good story.

[DK]

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Poor guy, everybody's gotta start somewhere, though, right?

Don't get discouraged.

[Valkysas]

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if you can't take criticisms, then don't bother posting. I don't agree with the WAY some people criticized, but you seriously cannot expect everyone to just gush positive remarks all over it even if they hate it.

[Funk]

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Is that period in the first post supposed to be a planet or a star or a space station or what?

[Big Rick Cook]

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Yoda h4xx0rz |_||2 mynde.

Awesome start to an awesome story that my awesome self will write.

[MisterManigation]

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I need some suggestions. Now that I look at it, I guess I should have checked my spelling. What are some ways to make it better in the next chapter?

[Valkysas]

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we can't comment on what we can't see.