On My Mind (It's an official Top 100 song!)

[Bon]

It's all rhythm and blues, and I'm not a master at it.

Written and recorded today. Feedback strongly welcome. Lyrics included in the link.

http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=10060952

EDIT: Finalized version here: http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=10067813

EDIT: Thanks to you guys playing my song, it hit the top 100 of the Urban charts. Now my song has an official "Top 100 Soundclick Song" attached to it. Thanks very much.

[AbstractOrigin]

Re: Demo: On My Mind

I liked it. Nice flow, and pretty good lyrics!

It sounds like you're aiming for an MJ type of style with
how you enunciate certain words in the lyrics.

The beat fits the mood you were trying to set up with the lyrics.

You need to fix that big gap at the end of the song though.

[Bon]

Re: Demo: On My Mind

I liked it. Nice flow, and pretty good lyrics!

It sounds like you're aiming for an MJ type of style with
how you enunciate certain words in the lyrics.

The beat fits the mood you were trying to set up with the lyrics.

You need to fix that big gap at the end of the song though.

Whenever someone says that I'm trying to aim for an MJ type, it really means something to me (in a good way). I already have some ideas on how to fix the demo, especially in the areas where there's blank space. I assure you, the final product will be a million times better. Thanks for the feed, Kumo.

[Bon]

Re: On My Mind (Finalized version)

Final version is up, guys.

[Alex]

Re: On My Mind (Finalized version)

Dude, this is awesome.

Simple pop music, I love it.

I was expecting a rap breakdown.

But it works well on its own.

[Bon]

Re: On My Mind (Finalized version)

Dude, this is awesome.

Simple pop music, I love it.

I was expecting a rap breakdown.

But it works well on its own.

Thanks for the feed, man. I still got to work out some kinks later this week.