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    New Day

    It’s a new day, so I need to bring the heat back
    With 16’s uploaded, getting feedback
    Whether it is good or bad, I really need that
    Penrage addicts been begging me for new crack

    Better later than never
    Creative juices drained rather quick
    And it seemed like forever
    Until it came back, along with motivation
    Lyrical orchestration, timing my respiration

    For simple rhyme schemes or the mutli-syllabics
    The latter’s my fave, so I’ll continue the habit
    Like hitting church on the Sabbath
    While avoiding the traffic
    Then we’re headed to lunch as a familial habit

    Check it, fret not ‘cause I’m just getting started
    Tell Martin Scorcese that we’re not departed
    The laziness I had: crushed down and discarded
    And the day still’s young, so you guys better mark it

    It's a new day...

    #2
    Re: New Day

    That's a rep! Great rapping, and I don't even listen to rap!
    Snake?...Snake?SNAKE!!!

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      #3
      Re: New Day

      Appreciate it.

      That was just a sample. The "song" of this is on my music page, which you can see in my signature.

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        #4
        Re: New Day

        I think it's just as mediocre as your other stuff.

        Also: choose a tense.

        Sivart: I'm a MAN.

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          #5
          Re: New Day

          Uh uh here comes Bon
          laying down beats like they do at cinna...bon.
          Thats a good rap, I do agree
          just like cinnabon and catastrophe
          Not sure where this raps suppose to go
          its just a praise or something like that
          I BE LAYING BEATS I AM SO PHAT
          Screenshot Let's Plays

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            #6
            Re: New Day

            You want to be on the remix, Duel?

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              #7
              Re: New Day

              This lacks a real rhythm. Plus, the content is no good. This reminds me of the rap that people consider good. Write about something real and not about yourself. You're pining and it's obvious.
              "You’ll only find the truth by looking with your own eyes and walking with your own feet." - Asch

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                #8
                Re: New Day

                Originally posted by Asch the Bloody View Post
                This lacks a real rhythm. Plus, the content is no good. This reminds me of the rap that people consider good. Write about something real and not about yourself. You're pining and it's obvious.
                Firstly the way YOU read it isn't necessarily the rhythm.

                Secondly, not bad, good to see rap not consisting of talking about sex for once, like the BS on the radio.

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                  #9
                  Re: New Day

                  Originally posted by Cloudnumbers View Post
                  Firstly the way YOU read it isn't necessarily the rhythm.

                  Secondly, not bad, good to see rap not consisting of talking about sex for once, like the BS on the radio.
                  Appreciate it, man.

                  I do try to stray away from mainstream topics they play on the radio, but I'll admit I write a few jams similar to it (like my song, "Perverted").

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