My New Game Story

[Gold Soul Demon Ranger]

My old Game I was working on got deleted when my RPG Maker XP trial expired. that ****** me off.
Now i've got a New story and Im getting it all set up for when I buy RPG maker XP tell me what you tink.

" Canon your main charecter is half def. In his childhood a mysterious warrior of Sound and Memory came and earased your hearing. In a flash the warrior was gone leaving Canon to suffer in the wilderness after his family couldn't find him. Now he has come to the country of Antera to find his father and brothers. While in Eco City the capital of Antera Canon meets up with Kitara a girl who hates her life she has tried to commit suicide. When Canon asks if she knows where his father may be she tells him about the Sanctuaries of The Elements. Now Canon is on his way to the 4 Sanctuaries of the Elements to find his father and the warrior who ruined his life"

[Duel]

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A little cliche yet original...sort of.

[Dusk Raven]

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My old Game I was working on got deleted when my RPG Maker XP trial expired. that ****** me off.

You'll still have your old game when you buy XP... I think.

[Gold Soul Demon Ranger]

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You do!?
djfaslkjd!! I didn't know that!!! I heard that it got deleted when time expired!!! Oh well i kinda like this story a little more than my other.

[Mintobrandybuck]

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I suppose on the surface it seems pretty...original. But it seems the gameplay will be kinda...done-before.


Originality goes deeper than just a way-out-there plotline. For a truly original game, you'll need some innovative ideas. There's plenty of threads here about how to spice up your game.

But, hey, what do I know? You can't really make a game nowadays without it being vaguely like some other game out there.

[Wavelength]

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Canon your main charecter is half def. In his childhood a mysterious warrior of Sound and Memory came and earased your hearing.

Wah wah waaaaaaaaaah...

Do watch your spelling, though. It's "deaf," and I think you meant EcHo City?

At any rate, it sounds pretty average to me. The characters could definitely be interesting, and you just need to make the personalities subtle enough so that they're likable and believable.

The Sanctuaries of the Elements sound like Macguffins, though--plot devices that are simply there to make things come together. Why would this help him find his missing relatives? More importantly, I'd warn you to be very careful about they way you handle the Sanctuaries-related plot arcs--any time the different-"element" versions of things are handled too similarly (Four Crystals, anyone?), it wears on most players' patience.

What can I say? Go for it, try to make it enjoyable, and make sure you have a blast creating it!

[Perversion]

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If he's deaf, maybe you could do something interesting with the available sounds in the game...like make it "deafeningly" (pun intended) silent, meaning NO SOUND WHATSOEVER, through some portion of the game, and somehow have him regain his hearing, and make it a swirling vortex of sounds for a few minutes until he becomes acclimated to hearing. Also, I wouldn't necessarily make him deaf unless there is an interesting reason for doing so (well, you DO have someone stealing his hearing from him, but are you going to make that an integral part of the plot, or make reference to it throughout the game? Because you just described a conversation he has with an NPC...how does that happen? Does he read lips? Does she write everything on a piece of paper?). Is there a compelling reason for his being deaf? Or is it merely a semi-novel way of rewriting the "revenge" cliche?

These might be things to think about.

[Wavelength]

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If he's deaf, maybe you could do something interesting with the available sounds in the game...like make it "deafeningly" (pun intended) silent, meaning NO SOUND WHATSOEVER, through some portion of the game, and somehow have him regain his hearing, and make it a swirling vortex of sounds for a few minutes until he becomes acclimated to hearing.

Now that's one very, very cool idea, though you have to be careful not to do it in an annoying way.

[Ryner]

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Game saves are usually kept in your Documents folder and remeain there regardless of what happens to your XP program.

[Perversion]

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Apropos to nothing, I HATE (not your fault, though) when someone quotes me, and then I go back and read it, and there's a glaring typo. Because even when I fix the original post, the typo is still there in all its glory.

The word "SO" meant to say "NO."

We now return to our regularly scheduled program.

EDIT re:Wavelength's comment:Yeah, this is twice I've pretty much come up with an interesting twist on a cliche for a newbie in the past few days, on the spur of the moment, without even thinking about it. If only I had come up with their original ideas, so I could incorporate these ideas I posted into my own games....well, basically, that would amount to another game idea that'll never come to fruition, anyway, so yeah....use these ideas as you see fit.

[Gold Soul Demon Ranger]

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I'll Give a little more about the story (sorry for my spelling errors)

Canon travels to ECO not echo but ECO City the Capital City of Antera. He is in search for his father and brothers Bayonette and Musket (everyone in his family have names of guns). He meets up with a suicidal girl and asks if she has any idea where his father is. She tells him no but inside the 4 Sanctuaries of the elements there are shards of a mirror that shows one anything the holder wants to know. They travel to the first sanctuary of Fire and Smoke and meet up with an Angelic Lancer. He shows them the way to and through the Sanctuary and then becomes an official member of your party. Reply again if you want even more info.

[Gold Soul Demon Ranger]

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Wah wah waaaaaaaaaah...

Do watch your spelling, though. It's "deaf," and I think you meant EcHo City?

The Sanctuaries of the Elements sound like Macguffins, though--plot devices that are simply there to make things come together. Why would this help him find his missing relatives? More importantly, I'd warn you to be very careful about they way you handle the Sanctuaries-related plot arcs--any time the different-"element" versions of things are handled too similarly (Four Crystals, anyone?), it wears on most players' patience.

it is supposed to be Eco. Im sorry about spelling it def instead of Deaf i didn't catch that.
The sanctuaries of the elements have shards of a mirror that show you what ever you want to know(a little cliche i know i couldn't think of anything else my imagination only goes so high) the sanctuaries though are based off of the elements and alter-elements which are quite different

element - Alter-element
Fire and Smoke
Water and Mist
Earth and Thunder
Wind and Nature
Light and Ice
Dark and Gravity
Psychic and Spirit/Undead
Sound and Memory
Time and Illusion
Chaos and Omega

Im not going to make it so there is no sound he is not completely Deaf he is just half-deaf

[Karr Lord of Chaos]

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If he's deaf, maybe you could do something interesting with the available sounds in the game...like make it "deafeningly" (pun intended) silent, meaning NO SOUND WHATSOEVER, through some portion of the game, and somehow have him regain his hearing, and make it a swirling vortex of sounds for a few minutes until he becomes acclimated to hearing. Also, I wouldn't necessarily make him deaf unless there is an interesting reason for doing so (well, you DO have someone stealing his hearing from him, but are you going to make that an integral part of the plot, or make reference to it throughout the game? Because you just described a conversation he has with an NPC...how does that happen? Does he read lips? Does she write everything on a piece of paper?). Is there a compelling reason for his being deaf? Or is it merely a semi-novel way of rewriting the "revenge" cliche?

These might be things to think about.

now that is innovation! id very much love to see a game like that, its just so outside the norm that it would be very interesting.

[Perversion]

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That's why I'm here.

[Ryner]

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Bayonette and Muskette are terrible names.

P.S. A bayonet isn't a gun.