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    My story

    first let me introduce my self, im kingcoleiv, i love all rpgs, my favorite is suikoden and final fantasy. i love wow and i started playing rpg maker 3 just less than a week ago. this is my story so far.

    Chronicles Of Alexander

    Once apon a time there lived a boy named alexander, and with his father the king and his mother the queen of qui'ro grasslands, they are a rich family and happy, but oneday something happened. when alexander was 16 his mother disapeard and about a week later the knights and messengers told alexander his mother was murdered. in shock alexander gone to gate and demanded to leave his home. in the years he was gone, he thought of the events going on between his mom's death. his mom and dad argued all day, they threatened each other and did not stop. though they sometimes cooled down. they kept getting worse. after 9 years of non stop thought and traveling. he came back home and questioned his father what happened. the father pledged non guilty but alexander knew his father was wrong. after countless argueing he went into the inn and for some reason fainted..in the darkness he heard a voice of a old man laughing and saying "alex... alex...alex.. your such a fool! all this time i have been watching you! alex apeared and talked and said. who are you! "oh .. no one.. heheh.... just your DEATH! then alex woke up in a bed in the inn. he gathered his things and he knew it was time to find out the truth. this is his story. (game continues). btw im a newbie
    Last edited by kingcoleiv; 10-18-2007, 09:09 PM. Reason: oh i forgot to mention, he will have 3 more group members and sometimes 4. Feir the ranger, grol the warrior, and more
    Tyler David Hanzelka. yes, i know my last name is long! ... /cry

    #2
    Re: My story

    You know how to use punctuation, unlike most newbies

    Good storyline, just needs to be tweaked a little.

    Welcome to the Pavilion!

    Here I come Pav, like the Kool-Aid man barging into a funeral! Oh yeah!

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      #3
      Re: My story

      Doesn't sound very interesting. Nothing in the story seems to stand out.
      Screenshot Let's Plays

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        #4
        Re: My story

        How does nothing stand out? I havent heard anything like this before.
        Last edited by JPS; 10-18-2007, 09:11 PM.

        Here I come Pav, like the Kool-Aid man barging into a funeral! Oh yeah!

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          #5
          Re: My story

          Nothing in the story makes me think: "Oh, cool!. It just makes me think, "Oh, sounds ok."
          Screenshot Let's Plays

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            #6
            Re: My story

            Coming up with a good story is difficult. I am having that dilemma right now.
            That's why I've been killing so much time on here lately.

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              #7
              Re: My story

              ty for the comments. i am very suprised!. if you want more info, here it is

              Fields: 40%
              Events: 10 %
              characters: 45%
              Descriptions: 80 %

              what to expect:
              fun and thrilling storyline.
              interesting puzzles.
              powerful spells to destroy your enemy.
              strong and weak bosses and enemies
              Long And Brain busting dungeons! (well.. sort of)
              Twists that will make your mind burst with excitement and wtf? kind of feeling.
              Powerful armor and weapons for you and your party to kill your enemies!
              potions,runes,and keys!
              fun and brain bursting fun coming soon to you!

              other info: (SPOILER).. when at the beginning at the game. look behind the inn. you will see a dude in a blue hat. he will tell you hints and other things about this game. how to save. teleport and more. call him your game master lol. then in green leaf village in qui'ro forest. you will see a giant tree. by it will be a witch. she will tell you about spells and powers and other attacks with mana.
              in gorou village. talk to the barbarian by the hut, he will tell you about physical strenth and armor, and even good ways to smash your enemies!
              BIG SPOILER!!! BOOM! (look in the school in the village you start in and look for a man in knight armor named edd. talk to him and solve the riddles and he will join your group.
              Tyler David Hanzelka. yes, i know my last name is long! ... /cry

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                #8
                Re: My story

                Why does the %'s take up 175%?

                Here I come Pav, like the Kool-Aid man barging into a funeral! Oh yeah!

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                  #9
                  Re: My story

                  oops im sorry. i meant that like how much i got complete of that certain thing.
                  sorry
                  Tyler David Hanzelka. yes, i know my last name is long! ... /cry

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                    #10
                    Re: My story

                    Howdy, sounds like you have put a lot of thought into it thus far (that is a good thing)

                    A couple questions - How long (roughly) do you plan to make this game?

                    How many different side quests do you think you will have?
                    "Dans le veritable amour c'est l'ame, qui enveloppe le corps"

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                      #11
                      Re: My story

                      Originally posted by Duelexpert View Post
                      Doesn't sound very interesting. Nothing in the story seems to stand out.
                      Ignore him. He always says that.

                      Anyways, it sounds pretty good to me, It's certainly not your average game.

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                        #12
                        Re: My story

                        Sounds pretty average to me
                        Screenshot Let's Plays

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                          #13
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                          Originally posted by Duelexpert View Post
                          Sounds pretty average to me
                          There's alot in it that you may have kinda saw before. Prince's Mom goes missing... Blah,blah,blah. He goes to find her, blah,blah,blah.

                          But kingcoleiv has actually filled those "blah,blah,blahs" with imformation that is interesting. So would say it sounds pretty good.

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                            #14
                            Re: My story

                            Yeah. Average noobie stuff.
                            "Mindless killing doesn't do a lot for me anymore." - Sampson

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                              #15
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                              Yeah, there are a few new elements. So I guess it saves it
                              Screenshot Let's Plays

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