New and need advice

[Gerad]

I'm new to the whole RPG Maker, I just bought 3 and have a game started but I would like to know what people think of my Idea.

It's called "Demartin"

It's the story of Jarik. He is an archer who just graudated from the Ranger School. He is sent to rescue 2 girls who wondered into a cave in search of a monster to kill. He gets there finds the girls named Domanic (a shinto warrior a.k.a samuri) and Kara (a summoner) they band together to defeat the beast and they obtain a map peice. They get back to the ranger school and show the map peice to Liza (the leader of the school) Here we find out that Liza's father wrote the map. It leads to the Demartin. The Demartin is a book that when used can give anyone the power of the Devil himself. Liza's father found this book and tried to hide it but the king came and stole it. The king was arrogant and told Liza's father where the book would be before killing him. Before Liza's father drew his final breath he marked the 4 most deadly places in Garoon (the country your in) and the kings hiding place. He tore the map in 4 and sent them to the 4 most dangerous places using waht little magical power he had left. Each peice leads to another peice until you have them all and it shows you were the Demartin is hidden. He did this so only the strongest could reach the king and defeat him. Now Jerik, Domanic, and Kara must follow the map and bring the Demartin back to Liza who claims she knows how to destroy it.

Comments are greatly appricated and sorry for any misspellings.

[Zeos]

Re: New and need advice

Lol, our main characters have the same name.

[H2SO4]

Re: New and need advice

Lol, our main characters have the same name.

Really? Because I had a minor character named Jarik in my game as well, I'm not sure where I got the name though.

[Ryner]

Re: New and need advice

Your story is typical, nothing really jumps off the page for me.

[Gerad]

Re: New and need advice

First off I do believe I found the charcter name Garik in the sample data and I added a J for Jarik. Second I do have alot in store for the story that I don't want to give away yet. Who can you trust, is there really a Demartin, and what really happened with Liza's father.

[Ryner]

Re: New and need advice

Yes, that's what 95% of people say.

"Hi, here's my story, I know it sounds like every other story out there, but I have a lot of other things in store that I can't tell you because I don't want to ruin it."

And then they wonder why nobody is interested in their game.

[Gerad]

Re: New and need advice

Yes, but if we reveal our key plot points then it ruins the game when its played because you know how it ends anyway. If I went and told you they all died in the end would there be a point in playing in the first place?(they don't all die) If you know the ending then what's the point of the beginning?

[Perversion]

Re: New and need advice

Most people, when they play your game, are not going to remember every post and detail you've divulged about it anyway, though.


And also, concurring with Ryner, why does everyone think a "twist" in the plot is automatically gonna make the game good?

[Ryner]

Re: New and need advice

Yes, but if we reveal our key plot points then it ruins the game when its played because you know how it ends anyway. If I went and told you they all died in the end would there be a point in playing in the first place?(they don't all die) If you know the ending then what's the point of the beginning?

I'm not telling you to reveal the ending, I'm just telling you to give us more info about the game than the exact same storyline we've heard a million times before.

Any unique gameplay elements? Do your characters break away from the usual mold? Is there anything at all about your game that you can tell us that'll make us say, "Wow, that sounds cool. I'll have to give this game a try."?

We don't have to be interested in your game, it's your job to change that.

And also, concurring with Ryner, why does everyone think a "twist" in the plot is automatically gonna make the game good?

That wasn't my point.

[Zeos]

Re: New and need advice

Really? Because I had a minor character named Jarik in my game as well, I'm not sure where I got the name though.

I figured it out, I found, "Jarik" in the premade data. I just used a, "e" instead of, "a."

[Gerad]

Re: New and need advice

I realize that it is not your job to be enthused with my game. I have planned allot for this game such as mini-games, side quests, optional bosses and optional characters but I really don't want to promise anything because I am new to the system. I want to have mini-games that involve gambling, fishing, and fortune telling. I plan on having a slew of extra dragons you don't have to beat but can, and after you beat the main story line I plan on having numerous side quests to do afterwords, But I don't want to say my game is going to have this. Not to accuse anyone but allot of people around here are very hypercritical and if I promise these things now and they don't end up in the game then your just going to bash me later. I plan on having it but If I can't figure out how to do it then I don't want to be caught in a "well I promised it but I can't deliver." I have told you what I know I can deliver, a thrilling story line with integral characters but I don't want to make a promise I can't keep.

[Lord_Mofop]

Re: New and need advice

if this is your first time working with the software, then i wouldnt be so worried about what others think.

just take your time to understand the software before you plan on making an rpg to show to others.