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Riotsword
04-10-2005, 06:22 AM
Man, looking at Alto's poems reminded me that I had wrote some poetry and saved them on my computer... Leave it to the internet to make me forget I had them.

So, here's some of my poems. This first one is kind of an incomplete poem, kinda made for a song.

...And The Weak Shall Inherit The Earth

We're here in town square,
See the fountain, here before you.
Drop in a quarter and make a wish.
And do what you have to do.

'Cause we're not going to be here,
Yeah, we're all going to be empty space.
No one in this little town,
Even notices we're here anyway.

Nothing in here ever seems right.
Like life lived under a microscope.
Pressed underneath the sheet of glass,
Choking, suffocating, without hope.

And the weak shall inherit the earth
While the men in their ivory houses fall
We, the downtrodden have had enough
The weak shall be taking it all

This next one is the first one I wrote on my WordPad. This one was also made for a song.
A Grim Fairy Tale

Not for you, not for me
Nothing is the way it has to be
All the time you wanted to be free
Is the kind of fate I had to see

All the hours spent
Working towards your own ends
And here I am, broken and bent
And to think I thought you were heaven-sent

Here is my life in an open book
The endless time of mine that you took
All of my desires are now for naught
And I thought that I was the one you sought

Endings of these stories go
'Happily Ever After', but no
This heart of mine I had to show
And you took it away, I feel so low

The lies I always heard you say
You think everything has to go your way
You think that I'd ask you to stay?
Keep talking like that, I just may

Kill you, this time...
In this heart of mine...
Kill you, this time...
In this heart of mine.

And here's the last one for the post. This one's free form.

Depression Jig

I struggle in your arms,
waiting for release
Things never seemed so dim
until I ran into you.

Another line drawn into the sand
Another line on the mirror
Cut into shape by a razor blade
That was my biggest fear.

This time, I will not forget
everyday seems to be made into the same
And the more things I did I regret,
Makes it harder to escape

My soul feels ill
I think I'm dying.
Or maybe that's just
Whenever I'm around you.

So take your pills and your drugs
Maybe you'll wither and die
And leave me to be taken away.
It's you I now defy.

What'chall think?

Big Rick Cook
04-10-2005, 05:00 PM
They sound familiar, have you posted them before?

Riotsword
04-10-2005, 08:30 PM
Nope, not me. I haven't posted poems at the pav before, even at the ezboard pav.

Big Rick Cook
04-10-2005, 10:12 PM
They're not bad, per se, but they lack a certain quality that Alto's poems have. Granted, I generally don't read all of his poems, but the ones I do read have had a greater effect on my thoughts and feelings.

These are more reminiscient of punk songs; they read fast, and have harsh lines. This makes them detached, yet catchy in my mind.

Riotsword
04-10-2005, 11:09 PM
Punk song, eh? :lol

Here's another one, this was kind of written to be a punk song on purpose! :)

Cross-Bearing Idiot

Waking up on a Sunday afternoon,
I'm so wasted, what did I do last night?
I think I took some ecstasy
And I might have gotten in a fight.

Stumble to the bathroom and relieve myself
For about fifteen minutes...
Step out and survey the damage, the room
Looks like something I started and never finished

Family's coming over later today,
Think I might fake my death to get out of it
I got this cross to bear, and by now
I know I'm a ****ing idiot

The pills have piled up
Inside my brain and they talk to me
And tell me to do **** I don't wanna do
I wish it could be something like an epiphany

So I go outside and have a smoke
And sit on the steps, the sun hurts my eyes
There's a dead cat stiffening on my lawn
And it's started to gather flies

Girl's coming over today,
Think I might fake my death to get out of it
I got this cross to bear, and by now
I know I'm a ****ing idiot

**** with my head some more
You'd like that wouldn't you?
Pretend you're my best friend,
*****, you wouldn't know a friend if they hit you.

I'm gonna go home and sleep this off
I just might be in a bad mood
Maybe I'll feel better in the morning
But probably not, I guess I'm screwed

The IRS is coming over today,
Think I might fake my death to get out of it
I got this cross to bear, and by now
I know I'm a ****ing idiot

Gustaff 13
04-10-2005, 11:19 PM
Interesting, if not a little angsty.

But, lordy, follow a rhyme scheme dude...

Riotsword
04-10-2005, 11:22 PM
Why do I need to rhyme to make poetry???