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    I haven't posted a thread here in "Imaginari" before, but this is something I've worked on recently. This first poem is related to something everyone has to deal with at some level.

    SEXUAL TEMPTATION

    All around me
    To and fro
    In front, behind
    Above, below
    I cannot escape
    From the attack
    -------------------------
    Within my head
    Around my face
    Inside my brain
    It's everyplace
    Turning what was once
    White into black
    -------------------------
    And as I try
    To live my life
    It cuts like
    A hundred tiny knives
    Slowly tearing warm chunks
    From my heart
    -------------------------
    I turn away
    Successfully
    The next time, though,
    Deciding not to flee,
    I look again and
    Feel the battle start
    -------------------------
    Oh God, to you
    Alone, I turn
    And ask, no plea
    This filth to burn
    Out of my mind
    forever and a day
    --------------------------
    For if your Word
    Can take its place
    And songs of joy
    Fill in the space
    Then it will have no room
    To come inside and play

    Pagerron 10/29/06

    This one is a more light-hearted one that I wrote in high school. The names of teachers have been omitted.

    A DAY AT MY HIGH SCHOOL

    You wake up at five-thirty to catch the "guagua" at six.
    There are no more Cocoa Puffs, Corn Flakes, or Trix.
    You arrive to school at seven-twenty eight.
    You run into the green building inside of the gate.

    You walk into school, still sound asleep.
    You sit down in first period and your watch goes "beep."
    The teacher drones on and tries to keep attention.
    The students are asleep or making sounds that I can't mention.

    The bell finally rings. You rush to to door.
    Now there's homeroom, then only six periods more.
    Songs play on the PA. You put your head on the table.
    "The yearbook's ninety-nine dollars and the team wasn't able."

    You're out of homeroom. It's time for period two.
    You see a teacher on the floor. His face is blue.
    He's calling for help. He's pulling out his hair.
    You can't be late to next period, so you leave it to --- .

    You open the door. Everyone looks glad.
    The teacher's got a fever. "Too bad."
    Your sub is six feet tall, clipping toenails at the desk.
    Her hair is dark brown, serving as a pigeon's nest.

    The bell rings for class to start. The sub let's out a roar.
    Her breath is like a toxic wind rolling into shore.
    No one blinks. We're all too frightened to move.
    Scratching the board with her nails, she makes a deep groove.

    She gives fourteen detentions, which no one will serve.
    She's built just like Big Foot with not one womanly curve.
    Thirty seconds left. You want to leave.
    The bell rings three times. You're finally relieved.

    You stop at your locker between second and third.
    Between wings B and C you spot the famous chicken bird.
    You're now in third period, almost halfway through the day.
    You color and do dittos. That teacher shouldn't get paid.

    Halfway through the class, the fire alarm rings.
    As people leave the room, they start to sing.
    Standing outside, you see your friend's car is wrecked.
    You can't go out to lunch; you'll get no respect.

    You're late for fourth period. The teach doesn't mind.
    He picks up the paper that you never could find.
    You talk 'til the bell that's been held for ten minutes.
    You just can't wait for lunch, where the lady'll give you spinach.

    The day's gone really slowly. It's time for a high school lunch.
    You bite into the pizza. The roach goes crunch.
    You swallow the milk that tastes like mozzarella.
    Then the salad and hashbrowns start mating with the jello.

    You skip fifth period. You see Mrs. ---.
    You'll have to go to sixth where you'll freeze to the bone.
    You talk about Homer, Clymnestra, and Paris.
    There are so many names. No one really cares.

    Now for period seven. You're feeling dead.
    You have to copy notes from the overhead.
    You talk current events, and you want to go home.
    One the "guagua" that's yellow with bumpers of chrome.

    Pagerron - high school

    Have a great night everyone. Comments are welcome.
    Last edited by Pagerron; 01-08-2008, 06:59 PM.
    " I am the way, the truth, and the life. No one comes to the Father but by me. " - Jesus

    #2
    Re: Poetry by Pagerron

    Instead of starting a new thread, I thought it would be better to continue the one I had started before. Besides, that helps me keep everything in one place.

    AIRPORT 2/3/07

    I find myself in Terminal 10.
    It's time to sit and wait again
    And people-watch as I wait for my plane.

    A happy old man downs his pills with a Coke
    As CNN drones on.
    A brown-haired beauty reads a Russian novel
    With her headphones on.

    A little girl takes out her crayons
    Opening her coloring book.
    One of the airline pilots
    Hides with his laptop in a corner nook.

    A worn-out mom huddles in a chair
    Her newest child to feed.
    A tanned young woman thumbs through a mag.
    Her eyes are gorgeous indeed.

    A three-chinned lady in an orange T-shirt
    Takes on her Sudoku puzzle.
    A spoiled lad barks at his mom
    I wish he had a muzzle.

    Laptop cases and bags on wheels
    Line the floor around my feet.
    People start to chat
    With those they'd otherwise not meet.

    The dirty backpacks and faux furs
    The I-Pods and sunglasses
    The nose wipes, sneezes and yawns
    Come and go as time slowly passes.

    Then comes the announcement,
    "Now boarding Section One."
    I keep my seat because I know
    My time to go has not yet come.
    Last edited by Pagerron; 02-22-2007, 06:33 PM.
    " I am the way, the truth, and the life. No one comes to the Father but by me. " - Jesus

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      #3
      Re: Poetry by Pagerron

      Originally posted by Pagerron View Post
      I haven't posted a thread here in "Imaginari" before, but this is something I've worked on recently. This first poem is related to something everyone has to deal with at some level.

      SEXUAL TEMPTATION

      All around me
      To and fro
      In front, behind
      Above, below
      I cannot escape
      From the attack
      -------------------------
      Within my head
      Around my face
      Inside my brain
      It's everyplace
      Turning what was once
      White into black
      -------------------------
      DUKAKIS!
      Last edited by Czechs Mex; 02-05-2007, 04:11 PM.

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        #4
        Re: Poetry by Pagerron

        What I mean in the second stanza is that temptation is all around us and enters our mind, as a result. Then the pure clean thoughts are changed into darkness because we let the the unclean things we see (and even hear) enter our minds and change us. We so need God's help to focus on Him in this day and age. The "it" in the second stanza refers to the temptation itself.
        Last edited by Pagerron; 02-05-2007, 03:32 PM.
        " I am the way, the truth, and the life. No one comes to the Father but by me. " - Jesus

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          #5
          Re: Poetry by Pagerron

          I love observational poetry like that last one, a small suggestion for next time maybe though is adding a few more metaphors comparing the things you see. Otherwise, I like it.
          Grow!

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            #6
            Re: Poetry by Pagerron

            Hey, altoecko, I really appreciate the comment. From someone with the poetry topic you have going, it is quite the compliment.

            I know my poetry is a work in progress. Sometimes I feel like I'm trying to force the rhyme. I'm not very good with just writing down my thoughts in poetry form without trying to rhyme them.

            Well, hey, we press on, right? I guess the more we write, the better we get, but I'm just talking to myself here. You've definitely got the knack.
            Last edited by Pagerron; 02-07-2007, 10:18 PM.
            " I am the way, the truth, and the life. No one comes to the Father but by me. " - Jesus

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              #7
              Re: Poetry by Pagerron

              These are pretty well written. I enjoyed them.
              I liked the observational views of AIRPORT 2/3/07.
              Although i must say, i'm not really into the whole religious undertone of SEXUAL TEMPTATION.
              But I was thinking of a plan to dye one's whiskers green.

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                #8
                Re: Poetry by Pagerron

                I'm glad you liked the airport one. I had fun writing it while I was sitting there watching everyone around me.
                I respect your opinion about the first poem.

                Well, this is one I just wrote here in the computer lab at school.

                The Computer Lab


                Sitting here while keeping watch
                With an aching back
                As their hands are raised for questions
                Wanting me to pick up their slack.

                I ask them to turn off their cell phones
                And put away their food.
                They think I’m just giving them grief
                When they’re the ones who’re rude.

                Do they not see I want to help them
                Better themselves the most they can?
                It seems finding the quickest shortcut
                Is what has become their plan.

                Why do they have to snap their fingers
                When a query they desire to make?
                I’m not a pet, a dog or cat
                Their orders all to take.

                Come on people! Concentrate!
                Just read the instructions on your screen!
                I’m sick of answering your questions
                Trying desperately not to be mean!

                Oh wait. Okay. Relax. Calm Down.
                This stress is going to my head.
                How important is it anyway?
                I’ll pray and ask for help instead.
                Last edited by Pagerron; 02-22-2007, 06:33 PM.
                " I am the way, the truth, and the life. No one comes to the Father but by me. " - Jesus

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                  #9
                  Re: Poetry by Pagerron

                  There were parts where I was reminded of Shel Silverstein in the School poem.

                  It's all good.

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                    #10
                    Re: Poetry by Pagerron

                    Modern Day Messiah

                    Hanging there, he was quite the spectacle
                    For the first few minutes.
                    We stopped and looked to see,
                    And laughed, and mocked, and spat in glee.

                    After a while, boredom set in
                    So we returned to our business
                    Our cell phones ringing, Blackberries on
                    Browsing the web again, our thoughts of him were gone.

                    And there he remained
                    Looking out over the masses.
                    The fast cars, high speed games, communication
                    Didn’t change the reason why he’d come for us, his nation.

                    A tear rolled down his cheek
                    As he took his final breath
                    Knowing what he’d face for us, for you and me.
                    At least one day he knew we’d truly see.- 2/14/07


                    Rest - 2/15/07

                    Oh, the wears and tears of life
                    Have taken their toll on me today.
                    Ninety minutes left of work.
                    I’m so ready to be on my way
                    And hit the street.

                    My aching burning eyes
                    Are telling me they want to close.
                    I have to keep awake here
                    So that nobody knows
                    My lack of sleep.

                    I can see my bed and feel the sheets
                    The pillow beneath my head.
                    It’s all an illusion though
                    A hazy path down which I’m led,
                    This foggy street.

                    Well, one hour and fifteen left
                    Before I get to go.
                    Oh, but I have to drive home still
                    Tell me it isn’t so.
                    Here comes defeat.

                    No, I must not give in.
                    “Get up and walk around
                    Splash some water on your face,”
                    My lips resound.
                    “You won’t be beat.”

                    That’s good. I feel better now.
                    Let me sit down and relax
                    Oh, this cushioned chair
                    So comf….ZZZ
                    Last edited by Pagerron; 02-22-2007, 06:34 PM.
                    " I am the way, the truth, and the life. No one comes to the Father but by me. " - Jesus

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                      #11
                      Re: Poetry by Pagerron

                      -Removed-
                      Last edited by Pagerron; 07-18-2007, 06:42 PM.
                      " I am the way, the truth, and the life. No one comes to the Father but by me. " - Jesus

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                        #12
                        Re: Poetry by Pagerron

                        You sound way to distant from your subject; the whole thing reads like a science report.

                        It doesn't even sound like you care about your subject? Do you? If so, you need to be more compelling, because, well, take this stanze:

                        "She asked me about myself.
                        I shared a little bit. Not much.
                        I told her about my work and family
                        Thus and so and such."

                        Boring as hell. Reading that I picture the narrator, after a long day of work, sitting on a bench waiting for a chance to leave. Which Is what I wanted to do half-way through reading, too.
                        My kind of life’s no better off
                        If I’ve got the map or if I’m lost.

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                          #13
                          Re: Poetry by Pagerron

                          Irate Giraffe, you didn't leave halfway through the poem. Thank you for the unexpected and quite candid post.

                          In the stanza you quoted, the one where I talk about what I told her about myself, you're right. It's boring. That's how I felt about what I was telling her. My life and job, etc. seem boring to me compared to her. So in a sense I agree with you even though it's not for the reason that you stated.

                          Thanks for the post, my friend. I'll work on getting the people reading my poetry to feel what I'm feeling. I'm still trying to figure out the feelings I have for her since we're just now getting to know each other after all this time.

                          Hey, do you have any comments on any of the other poetry?
                          " I am the way, the truth, and the life. No one comes to the Father but by me. " - Jesus

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                            #14
                            Re: Poetry by Pagerron

                            It certainly seems as if you are in a creative groove lately. If your game is on the back burner for a bit, that's okay, because it sounds as if those creative juices are still flowing.

                            As for the poems themselves, not to necessarily specify any one of them, but the rhymes for the most part seemd okay. A little obvious at times, but all in all that part of it worked fairly well.

                            The only thing I was having problems with in a few of them was the meter. It's hard to keep to a regular meter sometimes if there is so much information you need to convey in any given line, but if one line has 7 or 8 syllables, and its rhyming line has only 4 or 5, it makes the poem feel a bit stilted, and it does not flow like it should. I think the idea is to have a nice, flowing rhythm for the poem that seems natural for the subject you are describing.

                            Having said all of this, you've read my poems in A Series Aside, Page, and you know that I fall prey to some of these things too. It's just a good thing if possible to avoid.

                            Anyway, that's my two cents.

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                              #15
                              Re: Poetry by Pagerron

                              Quite the poet, you are! I really enjoyed your poems--they made me smile when I was having a bad day.

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